''Have you ever slept on the bus during a night ride ? Suddenly you wake up feeling like you had slept ages and ages, but somehow you realize you are not so far where you were supposed to be. However, something is not quite normal. People around you are pale, dull, in a manner you see them with no life inside.

No one gets off the bus. The driver does not stop neither to pick up nor to leave people behind.

... ''

HEY GUYS !
WOULD BE AMAZONG HAVING SOMEONE TO CORRECT THIS PART OF A TALE I'VE BEEN WRITING

AND TELL ME WETHER YOU FIND IT INTERESTING OR NOT

by the way, I`m not a native, so I`d appreciate if any native english speaker could tell me if all I have written sounds `natural` ...

And you ? Have you ever thought about being a writer ?