Darry
僕の俳句...

春を来た

それぞれの道を

歩いていく

 

テーマ:卒业

 

 

 

Jan 19, 2015 1:19 AM
Comments · 4
1

ありがとう

January 19, 2015
1

俳句 is better to have 5 7 5 sounds.


5) 春来た

8) それぞれの道を
6) 歩いていく

テーマ:卒


That's okay. But the following one is better.

 

5) 春が来た
7) それぞれの道
5) 歩いてく

テーマ:卒業

 

I'm not familiar with Haiku though. Anyways, great work.

January 19, 2015

それぞれにそれぞれの

決めた道を歩き

February 13, 2015

My first try to write a haiku. If you find any errors, please let me know! lol

January 19, 2015