Engela燕
Rode the bikes a beautiful day

Yesterday my friends and I rode the bikes in the city near the reservoir.in the summer on The Forest trail rode the bikes
We are loudly to sing sing hehe:)
How long no so happy
I had a nice day!!

 

Jun 2, 2015 6:56 AM
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@Phil thank you very much!

I will more keeping try hard

June 5, 2015

it should very tired after a long  bike trip 

June 5, 2015

it should very after a long  bike trip 

June 5, 2015

Good job, I actually liked the Chinese turns of phrase — your version seems really poetic. Here are some corrections, because I know you’re interested in sounding like a native English speaker:

 

Yesterday my friends and I rode bikes in the city near the reservoir. In the summer, we ride bikes on the forest trail.
(While we ride,) We sing out loud hehe:)
I hadn’t been that happy in so long! (or "I was happier than I'd been in a long time" -- there are many options to say this.)
I had a nice day!!

 

You should use the “notebook entry” feature instead of the “discussions” feature if you’d like corrections.

June 5, 2015

Please correct my mistakes in grammar part 

Thanks

June 3, 2015
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