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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

i have already introduced myself just now . i don't have many many dreams .and maybe i have no dreams,or maybe i don't find yet. i want to find a guy who can help me find my dream exactly hobbies.

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    First notebook entry: Introducing myself

    i have already introduced myself just now . i don't have many many dreams .and maybe i have no dreams,or maybe i don't find yet. i want to find a guy who can help me find my dream exactly hobbies.

     

    1- I have already introduced myself just now- this means you introduced yourself to us in the past. so instead you need to say: 'Now I will introduce myself ...' 

    2- i - make sure you write it like this 'I' (capital letter) I don't... I have...I am...

    3-. you don't need to start a new sentence, I don't have many many dreams and maybe I... 

    4- or maybe i don't find yet. This is incorrect it should be- 'or maybe I haven't found any yet.'

    5-  i want to find a guy who can help me find my dream exactly hobbies.  


    okay good work, I can understand what you are trying to say but it doesn't read very well. I think you could write it like this instead:

    'I would like to introduce myself; I don't have many dreams, actually, I don't have any dreams but maybe that's because I haven't found any yet. I want to find a guy who can help me to find my dreams.'

     

    加油。我希望你会多多写!

     

     

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