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也许你觉得太慢,
也许你想不注意,
你要听说恋爱的汉语,
要听说我感觉。

你看见看我里面,
我最里边的想法。
我应该说什么?我做什么?
呆跟我。

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    Maybe you think I am [acting] too slow,也许你认为我太慢,
    you think of me as oblivious.你认为我不注意,
    You want to hear the words of love,你想听到爱的话语,
    want to hear my emotions?想知道我的感情,

    You see my inside,你看见我的内心,
    My inner-most thoughts我内心最深处的想法,
    What should I say? What should I do?我应该说什么?我应该做什么?
    Stay with me留在我身边。

     I think "留” is better ,because it has the meaning that you want her to stay with you. and the  emotional colouring is strong than "待",just my  opinion,hope it will be helpful!

    Maybe you think I am [acting] too slow,也许你觉得我反应迟钝,
    you think of me as oblivious.(也许)你觉得我不注意你。
    You want to hear the words of love,(也许)你想听(我说)爱你。
    want to hear my emotions?(也许你)想“听听”我在想什么?

    You see my inside,你(应该)看看我的内心,
    My inner-most thoughts(看看)我内心深处的想法。
    What should I say? What should I say?我应该说什么?我应该说什么?
    Stay with me待在我身边

     

     My little bit opinion:)

    也许你觉得我太慢热,
    也许你还不想太认真,
    你想听我说关于爱的话语, 想知道我的感觉吗?
    你是想知道我的内心, 我最真正的想法吗?
    我应该说什么?做什么?请告诉我。

    might you want to say:

    might you think I'm slow-stepe,

    might you don't want to take it serious,

    Do you want to heard  some words about LOVE from me?

    Do you want to know about my feeling?


    Do you want to know my inside,the deep in my heart?

    how should i say?how should i do?

    please tell me.



    Do I put that right?

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    以下为聊天内容:我以前在线上认识一个瑞典的男孩,他非常感性(sensitive ,not saying sexy..LOL),有时候感觉像个女孩一样,很可爱,有时候你会感觉他好像在向你撒娇(act like a spoiled child)一样,这一点对我个人来说非常有吸引力。所以看你的作文,我每一个字都看得懂,但是不确定你在说什么,我猜想是因为你们现在还处在恋爱第一阶段:互相有好感但还没有表白,所以才有了这首朦胧的“少男情怀”的小诗,我说的对吗?哈哈哈哈哈。


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    要听说我感觉。 

    也许你觉得太慢,

    认为我不注意,

    恋爱的词语

    我感觉的吗

     

    你看见里面,

    我最里边的想法。

    我应该说什么?我做什么?

    呆跟我。

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