First notebook entry: Introducing myself

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English at my school, because I want to improve my English. My native language is Vietnamese and I grew up in Viet Nam country. I enjoy listening to the music, reading newspapers, and sleeping.

Dear Thuy,

I have some comments for you as below:

1/ The sentence "I am learning English at my school because I want to improve my English" is grammatically correct.

But, the reason why you are learning English here is not persuadable. Why? Because, if you learn English at your school, the English language, in this case, is one of the compulsory subjects for you. But it is not your choice. That is why I deleted phrase "at my school"

2/ We should use gerund (verb-ing) after enjoy

3/ When you submit Notebook Entry, please choose the right language you are learning to ensure that your writting will come the the right place. You submission came to Vietnamese learning group. That is why your notebook have not been corrected yet.

Hope that I can help you ^.^