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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Let me introduce myself to you ,

My name is Elin, I am 33 years old, learning English is my passion .

and I do not use it at work.

I was born in Taipei County,

I'm single,and there were five people in my family before,

but now there are only four left,

as my dad passed away in February of last year

My mom is a retired hair stylist.

I have a younger brother and an older sister,

They are both married and both have children,

But my sister is divorced from her husband,

and my mother also got a divorce from my dad when I was a teenager

This is the main reason why I fear (marriage /getting marry)

My brother he ownes his own a telecommunications engineering company,

My sister is a telephone operator,

I was a real estate agent,I sold and rented houses to people ,

but now I am between jobs ~

I really like to travel. please help me upgrade my English,

and I can teach you chinese too~

I am looking forward to meet you soon ^^

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    First notebook entry: Introducing myself

    Let me introduce myself to you,

    My name is Elin, I am 33 years old, and learning English is my passion,

    and but I do not use it at work.

    I was born in Taipei County,

    I'm single,and there used to be were five people in my family before,

    but now there are only four left,

    as my dad passed away in February of last year.

    My mom is a retired hair stylist.

    I have a younger brother and an older sister. 

    They are both married and both have children,

    but my sister is divorced from her husband. 

    and My mother also got a divorce from my dad when I was a teenager. 

    This is the main reason why I fear (marriage/getting married).

    My brother he ownes his own a telecommunications engineering company. 

    My sister is a telephone operator. 

    I was a real estate agent; I sold and rented houses to people,

    but now I am between jobs. ~

    I really like to travel. Please help me improve upgrade my English,

    and, in exchange, I can teach you Chinese too.~

    I am looking forward to meeting you soon. ^^





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