the intrenet-a blessing or curse
There are dozens of reasons supporting my idea,first reason is that they can't sheule their time porperly ,most of students spend most time playing computer games,watching videos or chatting with friends.They seldom use machine to enlarge their konwledge or study.There is no doubt that they waste their time on Internet.
What's more,it takes long time for them to face with the computer ,so they seldom play sports and lack of excrises,also,due to face with screen their eyes' sigth become much poorer.
In a conclusion,If the college students can't use Internet apporiately,it will be harmful for them.
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Hello Such. How are you?
The internet-a blessing or curse"?
Nowadays, [Such, the term "Nowadays" is a very trite usage.
It goes without saying "nowadays" that you are writing in the context of contremporary affairs, so eliminate the word from your introduction, okay?
The Internet is widely used in many fields especially in compus ["compus" = campus, correct?]
Some people think it is harmful for college students to use the Internet but others object it. [Yes, but who is it in specific who thinks one way or the other? Quote some authorities on the subject. Otherwise, you are just publishing a common logical error designated the Fallacy of the Dicto Simpliciter ("Sweeping Generalization")]
In my opinion,I am in agreement with the former. That is, I think the Internet is a curse to university students.
There are dozens of reasons supporting my idea, [Okay, but unless you are using
"dozens" of examples, it will be better to write something like:
"There are several reasons I might cite, as follows.]
The first reason is that they can't shedule their time properly.
Most students spend most of their time playing computer games,
watching videos or chatting with friends.
They seldom use the machine to enlarge their knowledge or study.
There is no doubt that they waste their time on Internet.
What's more, [A most excellent transitional phrase. Very good, Such!]
What's more, it takes long time for them to interface with the computer,
so they seldom play sports and lack of exercise is a unhealthy.
Also, due to interface with the screen, their eyesight becomes much poorer.
In conclusion, f the college students can't use the Internet appropriately,
it will be harmful for them.
A most excellent, and lengthy essay. Very good indeed!---Warm regards, Bruce
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