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I'm suffering from insomnia

It began the Chinese New Year on 10 FEB, I found I couldn't sleep even in midnight.
SO this time i got out of bed.
My eyes want to close,but my brain is exciting.
My Chinese New Year holiday will end in 2 days.
I will hard work to achieve my aim.
Best wishes for a prosperous New Year!
Like the photo 4w led spot light to light up our life and our future.

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    I'm suffering from insomnia

    It began on Chinese New Year on 10 FEB ("It begain on February 10th, the first day of the Chinese New Year." This construction gives the reader a bit more mood and creates interest in the introduction of your story.) I found I couldn't sleep, even in the middle of the night(Is this what you were trying to say?)
    SO this time, I got out of bed.
    My eyes wanted to close, but my mind was too excited (about the holiday).
    Now my Chinese New Year holiday will end in 2 days.
    I will hard work to achieve my goals for the new year. (Is this what you want to say?)
    Best wishes for a prosperous New Year!
    Let the photo of the 4w led spotlights to light up our life and our future.

     

    I enjoyed your essay very much, Jane. Please let me know if I disturbed any of the thoughts you were trying to express or if you would like me to explain anything more clearly for you. 

     

    I'm suffering from insomnia

    It began the Chinese New Year on 10 FEB, I found I couldn't sleep even in after (the preposition would be at if you meant precisely 12:00) midnight.
    SO this time i got out of bed.
    My eyes want to close,but my brain is exciting excited (better is 'racing' - excited, exciting two adjectival forms derived from the verb 'to excite' present participle and past participle - cause and result)
    My Chinese New Year holiday will end in 2 days.
    I will hard work hard (word order for adverb) to achieve my aim.
    Best wishes for a prosperous New Year!
    I Like(?) the photo 4w led spot light to light up our life and our future.

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