Hey Sarah, I see that you are getting a lot of writing practice!

A short paragraph about the "University Tuition". Part 1. Could you please correct my notes?

Could you please take a look at my notes and correct them?
Thanks in advance.

It is clear that university tuition is not affordable for every student, especially after the global economic recession. Nowadays, due to economic crisis, which is prevailing all over the world, most families are grappling with multifaceted problems. They do not have sufficient money to put food on the table, let alone to sending (because you used "to put..." before, you have to use "to send") their offspring (offspring is correct, but it is very impersonal. I think children would be better here) to a university with high tuition. There is ample evidence that shows that if universities were  accessible for everyone, more students would attend universities. (because it is uncertain, you must use "were." for example, If they were richer, they would be able to afford tuition)Therefore, it is better to have lower tuition because (Before, it was not clear what you were referring to. I added this to improve the flow of the essay.) not only will society rely on its competent and skilled workers in the future, but it will also take advantage of its human capital, because such qualified workers can produce more economic value for society as well as boosting its economic growth.

I actually agree with your argument! Right now univiersity tuition is very expensive, and it is hard for families to pay for their children's education. In a year or too, even I will have to pay for college! These high prices are a little scary :s

Anyways, you did a great job (like always.) Keep up the good work! :D