First notebook entry: Introducing myself

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am a teenage girl , and I am learning English, beacuse I want to work in another country. I want to make friends from United States, England, Germany and from more countries of the world.I hope will succeed! :) 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am a teenage girl, and I am learning English, because(spelling) I want to work in another country and make friends from United States, England, Germany and from more countries of the world.  I hope I will succeed! :)

You have to connect two clauses with an and, which means you don't need a comma.  There always need to be a space after a comma and two after a period.

Hello there, welcome to italki! :)

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am a teenage girl, and I am learning English beacuse I want to work in another country. I want to make friends from United States, England, Germany and from more countries of the world. I hope so will succeed! :)

The only mistake was that your first sentence was too long, so I had to divide it. Great job, and good luck! :D