I came on a site to greet you *
Just I want to see you, to look at your works (you work much!).
I want to read your thoughts (you write always sincerely!).
I want to see your the friends. Your the friends are my friends.
I see your clever, kind the eyes. My a mood improves.
Now I want to read still the records of other participants.
I often meet interesting the thoughts.
I want to enter in discussion, but I don't have enough knowledge of language.
I made this photo: The apples lie on my table on a balcony.
Eat, please...
I love this song *
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RA1RH8rn0fE

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I came on a to this site to greet you *
Hello ! Today I am no don't (do not) have a an interesting story to tell you.
I just Just I want to see you, to look at your works (work - normally but not always singular) (you work much!).
I want to read your thoughts (you write always sincerely!).
I want to see your the friends. Your the friends are my friends.
I see your clever, kind the eyes. My a mood improves.
Now I still want to read still the records of other participants.
I often encounter meet interesting the thoughts.
I want to enter into discussion, but I don't have enough knowledge of language.
I made this photo: The apples lie on a my table on a my balcony.
Help yourself Eat, please...
I love this song *
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RA1RH8rn0fE
You seem to be using the definite and indefinite articles (a, an, the) wrongly or unnecessarily; they aren't required whenever there is a personal possessive pronoun (my, your ...) for example - because the pronoun already specifies 'which' object is involved. If you have adjectives with the noun the article will precede them.
Word/phrase order is the other aspect of your writing I notice, but that is harder to explain. If often is 'just so'!
The photograph is of apples on a table on my balcony - indefinite article for table and possessive for balcony ... I cannot easily explain why it must be so, but it is not so normal to have your table on someone else's balcony!
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