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我的老村庄(一)

First of all, this is not my original. It was written by Sam Thomas.

http://www.italki.com/entry/327035

I had his permission to steal his idea so that I can practise my Chinese. His imagery speaks of a common emotion which we all share at one time or another. True, if I were to write on the same theme, the imagery will be different as we have different experiences. Nevertheless, it was very beautiful and thought evoking.

Lately, I find no Muse come visiting my mind in the night. For all those native Chinese speakers, a tip or two from you would be most wonderful. I thank you in advance.

I wrote it in three different styles in the correction box. I find the poetic style the easiest to express. Perhaps this is due to my interest in that genre.

I thank you, Sam for being a sort of a muse to me. Without your work and permission, nothing will come out from my brains. I eagerly await your second part.

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    最近想起童年的時光, 因此昨天回到老家鄉村, 問問一些舊事. 八岁的時候, 已經搬了家. 這是我第二次回來. 下了巴士, 我走過那邊的教堂. 它已經有千年的歷史. 雖然我不是個深信宗教徒但仍然不得不訪. 因為它還是我洗礼的地方. 我對建築事事都有趣所以逗留多時. 裡面有两位老婦人, 非常鄰睦, 還熱心在告訴我教堂的歷史.

     

    晚上要吃飯了. 因為以前太年輕了所以不能進去村裡的一間酒吧飯店. 今夜的美餐不但便宜, 裝飾也很精緻. 牆上還有酒花一條條地掛着.

     

    吃完了飯就在溪邊漫步. 看到溪中的小流, 真覺得有運氣. 因為近來, 有很多雪積起來, 溶化的時候会變成危險的急流. 見了舊屋子就好像見了舊朋友一样. 回憶的美景就綿綿入神了.

     

    最近回憶童年時光. 因此昨日歸回老家鄉村, 尋訪些舊事. 八歲已搬去他處. 今次二度回來. 乘搭巴士後, 直至古教堂. 千年歷史悠悠. 雖無深信宗教的我, 仍然不得不訪. 總是我洗礼之處. 對建築有興, 就多逗留一時. 內有两婦人, 鄰睦非常, 熱心姁姁, 把一切関於教堂歷來瑣碎事蹟啟訴於我.

     

    晚上來了, 要到五臟廟去也! 往時年幼, 鄉村飯店不許進入. 今夜美烹非貴但裝飾華麗精緻. 牆上酒花朵朵點.

    飯後漫步小溪邊. 見了小流覺僥倖. 近來大雪紛飛, 溶化時危水怱怱. 一見房屋如見舊友. 綺夢美境綿綿入.

     

    昨日追憶童年時,
    今天故鄉二度來.
    下了巴士古堂去,
    千年歷史悠悠存.

     

    非深信宗教之我,
    難否是吾洗礼處.
    建築有興两婦在,
    姁姁歷來過去景.

     

    晚來酒吧五臟祭,
    小時不許入塲華.
    菜飾便宜画堂貴,
    牆上酒花朵朵添.

     

    飯後漫步小溪邊,
    僥倖大雪無急水.
    見故宅如見昔友,
    舊夢綿綿入心頭.

     

    Thursday, March 28, 2013

     

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