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I wish I have the temperament!

I would be
of great tolerance like Vast Ocean embracing streams;
of a highly height like one proudly peaking;
of powerful power like one spurring with long accumulation;
and of a deep depth like God spreading love.

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    I wish I had/ could have the temperament!

    I would be
    of great tolerance like Vast Ocean embracing streams;
    of a highly height like one proudly peaking;
    of powerful power like one spurring with long accumulation;
    and of a deep depth like God spreading love.

     

    excellent composition!

    its hard to retouch poetical texts, though i think from semantical aspects you have few things to reconsider; if not 'hightly' is an adjective, i'd preffer 'stately'. but 'hightly' is so unfamiliar a term and i feel it should follow a verb, just as 'prouldly peaking'.

    hen hao, jia you))

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