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Advertising of some consuming products like electronic devices will impose influence on youth who follow up the fashion timely. Do you think this is a positive or a negative trend?
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Advertising is omnipresent in modern society. It can be found in everywhere such as television, the Internet, newspapers, magazines, billboards and t-shirts. Teenagers are a prime target market as they are very impressionable to fashionable trends. In this essay, I intend to explore the both positive and negative sides of this issue.

With the advent of modern technologies, high-tech electronic devices which are highly promoted by advertisers have become indispensible tools with massive popularity among the young generation. Teenagers keep the pace with the trend is mainly because that electronic products provide great advantages to people’s lives. The products like portable computer, ipad or smart phone enable you to access any information you need in efficient way. It could also assist you greatly on the educational purpose, like online learning. The most important factor is that it provides the great convenience in people’s everyday communication. No matter how far you are, social networking has allowed friends to keep in touch from moment to moment.

However there are some negative effects should not be overlooked. Excessively following the trend and addiction to electronic gadgets creates much distraction to students from their learning which actually is a primary task in youth. While children put long hours on their gadgets, they spend less attention to assignments. Further more, a sedentary lifestyle which discourages exercises will eventually lead to many health issues, like obesity, eyes problems etc… In addition, constantly chasing modern products could bring some financial pressure to parents as we understand teenage are not mature enough to judge wisely what exactly they need. As a consequence, most of time they are induced to impulse shopping by attractive advertisements, which turned out to be a waste.

In conclusion, I believe advertising of promoting consuming electronic products has undoubtedly influence to our youth both negatively and positively. However both parents and schools should give good guidance and supervision to the youngers so that they will become wise consumers.

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    I have written an essay regarding the advertising effect on youth, i wish that someone could check .

    Advertising of some consumer products like electronic devices will impose influences on youth who follow up the fashion timely. Do you think this is a positive or a negative trend?
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    Advertising is omnipresent in modern society. It can be found in everywhere such as television, the Internet, newspapers, magazines, billboards and t-shirts. Teenagers are a prime target market as they are very impressionable to fashionable trends. In this essay, I intend to explore the both the positive and negative sides of this issue.

    With the advent of modern technologies, high-tech electronic devices which are highly promoted by advertisers have become indispensible tools with massive popularity among the young generation. Teenagers keeping the pace with the trend is mainly because those electronic products provide great advantages to people’s lives. The Products like portable computers, ipads and smart phones enable you to access any information you need in efficient way. They could also assist you greatly for the educational purposes, like online learning. The most important factor is that it provides the great convenience in people’s everyday communication. No matter how far you are, social networking has allowed friends to keep in touch from moment to moment.

    However there are some negative effects that should not be overlooked. Excessively following the trend and addiction to electronic gadgets creates much distraction to students from their learning which actually should be is a primary task for youth. When children many hours on their gadgets, they pay less attention to assignments. Further  more, a sedentary lifestyle which discourages exercises will eventually lead to many health issues, like obesity, eyes problems etc… In addition, constantly chasing modern products could bring some financial pressure to parents as we understand teenagers are not mature enough to judge wisely what exactly they need. As a consequence, most of time they are induced to impulse shopping by attractive advertisements, which turned out to be a waste.

    In conclusion, I believe advertising of promoting consuming electronic products has undoubtedly influenced to our youth both negatively and positively. However Both parents and schools should give good guidance and supervision to the youngers so that they will become wise consumers.

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