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(49) I truly want to develop my English skills and I'd love to have your help!

 

An Old man and a short boy.

“I sometimes drop a spoon.” a short boy said.
“Me too.” a short old man replied.

“I sometimes wet in my pants.” the short boy whispered.
“So do I.” the short old man said with a grin.

“I often cry” the boy said.
“Me too.” the man answered with nodding.

“However, what annoys me the most is that adults don't pay attention to me” the boy said.
Then, the man grasped the boy's hand with his wrinkled hand, saying. “I know what you mean.”

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The old man and the little boy

A little boy said, "I drop my spoons sometimes."
An old man said, "So do I."

The little boy whispered, "I wet my pants sometimes."
The old man grinned, "So do I."

The little boy said in a sad tone, "I cry sometimes."
The old man answered nodding, "So do I."

The little boy was upset, "But the worst thing is, grown-ups don't care about me."
The old man took the little boy's hand in his own shriveled hand. "I know what you mean."

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    (49) I truly want to develop my English skills and I'd love to have your help!

    An Old man and a short boy.

    “I sometimes drop the spoon,the short boy said.  [The boy and old man were introduced in the title so we use "the"]    ["the spoon" is idiomatic]
    “Me too,the short old man replied.

    “I sometimes wet _ my pants,” the short boy whispered. [Leave out the "in"]
    “So do I,” the short old man said with a grin.

    “I often cry,” the boy said.
    “Me too,” the man answered _ nodding. [Leave out the "with"]

    “However, what annoys me the most is that adults don't pay attention to me,” the boy said.
    Then the man grasped the boy's hand with his wrinkled hand, saying, “I know what you mean.”

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    The old man and the little boy

    The little boy said, "I drop my spoon sometimes."
    The old man said "So do I."

    The little boy whispered, "I wet my pants sometimes."
    The old man grinned. "So do I," he said. 

    The little boy said in a sad tone, "I cry sometimes."
    The old man answered nodding, "So do I."

    The little boy was upset. "But the worst thing is grown-ups don't care about me."
    The old man took the little boy's hand in his own shriveled hand and said, "I know what you mean."

    Please help me!
    Thanks!

    The Old Man and the Little Boy 


    A little boy declaredsaid, "I drop my spoons sometimes."
    An old man said agreed, "So do I."

    The little boy whispered, "I wet my pants sometimes."
    The old man grinned, "So do I."

    The little boy said admitted in a sad tone, "I cry sometimes."
    The old man answered nodding, "So do I."

    The little boy's voice rose, was upset, "But the worst thing is that grown-ups don't care about me!"
    The old man took the little boy's hand in his own shriveled cringly/wrinkly hand and lamented sadly, "I know what you mean."

    Please help me!
    Thanks!

    (49) I truly want to develop my English skills and I'd love to have your help!

    An Old Man and a short Small Boy.

    I Sometimes drop a the spoon.” a short boy said.
    “Me too.” An short old man replied.

    “I sometimes wet in my pants sometimes.” [What's the difference?]the short little boy whispered.
    “So do I.” the short old man said with a grinned.

    “I often cry!” the boy said.
    Me too So do I![Why I corrected this way even though it is correct?] the old man answered with noddeding.

    However, What annoys me the most is that adults don't pay attention to me!” the boy exclaimed. said.
    Then, The old man grasped the little [Why these adjectives added?]boy's hand with his wrinkled hand, saying. and said, “I know what you mean!” 

     

    Excellent.  Very philosophical. Can't say whose is better, you or your brother.  You both have different but great ideas to write.  I am very glad to take you two under my wing :)

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