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my trip to Japan I will have a trip to visit Yokohama University form 06/16 to 06/22. And I need to write a short paragraph representing the reason why I want to apply this trip. I wonder whether my short paragraph is good or not. Could someone help me to edit ??? Thank you :"> Reasons for applying trip to Yokohama University Two things I impress Japan most are its diversified culture and professional working style. When I was a child, I often read some manga like Doreamon or Crayon Shin-chan. To me, Doraemon and Shin go far beyond manga characters, they are really a part of my childhood. Those manga conjure up and nourish my interest to Japanese culture. Moreover, I really admire Japanese in terms of their cleverness and punctuality. I have some online Japanese friends in italki.com website, they are all hard-working and intelligent students. Chatting with them, I realize that I need to improve myself a lot to be a better one. By applying the trip to visit Yokohama university, I will have a great opportunity to meet new friends as well as learn deeply about Japanese culture and working style. It promises to be a wonderful and memorable trip in my student life.
May 23, 2013 5:16 AM
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my trip to Japan

I will have a trip to visit Yokohama University form 06/16 to 06/22. And I need to write a short paragraph representing/to represent(Usually,to+v. is for a destination and v-ing is for ongoing things)  the reason why I want to apply for this trip. I wonder whether my short paragraph is good or not. Could someone help me to edit correct/amend??? Thank you :">


Here are my reasons for applying a trip to Yokohama University

Two things I impress Japan most are its diversified culture and professional working style. When I was a child, I often read some manga like Doreamon or Crayon Shin-chan. To For me, Doraemon and Shin went go far beyond manga characters cause they  have really become a part of my childhood. Those manga conjoure up(or taught me to conjure,you want to express that?) and nourish cultivate/increase my interest to Japanese culture. Moreover, I really admire Japanese in terms of their cleverness and punctuality. I have some online Japanese friends in italki.com website, they are all hard-working and intelligent students. Chatting with them, I realize that I need to improve myself a lot to be a better one.
By applying the trip to visit Yokohama university, I will have a great opportunity to meet new friends as well as learn deeply about Japanese culture and working style. It promises There is no doubt that it mustto be a wonderful and memorable trip in my student life.

May 23, 2013
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My Trip To Japan

 

I will have a trip to visit Yokohama University form from 06/16 to 06/22. And I need to write a short paragraph representing   stating the reason why I wanted to apply on this trip. I wonder whether my short paragraph is good or not. Could someone help me to edit it? ??? Thank you. :">

Here are my reasons for the application applying for the trip to Yokohama University.

Two things I impress Japan impresses me the most are its diversified culture and professional working style. When I was a child, I often read some mangas like Doreamon or and Crayon Shin-chan. To me, Doraemon and Shin-chan go far beyond manga characters,. They are really a part of my childhood. Those These mangas conjured up and nourished my interest to Japanese culture. Moreover, I really admire the Japanese in terms of their cleverness and punctuality. I have some online Japanese friends in on italki.com website,. They are all hard-working and intelligent students. By chatting with them, I realized that I need to improve myself a lot to be get better in English. a better one. By applying for the trip to visit Yokohama University, I know that I will have a great opportunity to meet new friends as well as learn deeply about Japanese culture and working style. It promises I know that it will to be a wonderful and memorable trip in my student life.

 

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May 23, 2013
Oh my naughty. Peace with you , and i am watching you all the time. From Hang.
June 19, 2013
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