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Hello every one! This is the first notebook for me.
How are you?

I'd like to introduce about me.
My name is juri mizuki. I'm from Japan. So I live in Sendai what city northern Tokyo.
But I was born in Aomori. Do you know there?
Aomori is close to Hokkaido.
Hokkaido is north of Japan.

So you can understand about this place if you see tha map.

I belong to the pharmaceutical university grade 3rd.I am fresh man.
And I majoring pharmacy. All pharmacy student to spent for 6 years to learn about pharmacy detail.
We have to go to school for a long time than another student.
My most favorite Subject is physiology. I hate organic chemistry :(
It is so difficult. Now,I'm working STARBUCKS COFFEE JAPAN an the part time.
Because I like coffee so much,I love Starbucks!
Especially i like caffe Verona.this dark roasts beans is very delicious.

If you don't know STARBUCKS,you should search with google.
I have that this company is become loved from over the world's people.

Oh,it is so late now.i have to go to bed.

As a result,I'm going to study abroad since next year.
I will go to California :)
I have to study English so hard.
Please tell me,If you have a facebook or skype.
I want to talk with you and I can teach Japanese language for you.
I'm looking for ward to talk you soon!

Thank you.

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    Hello every one! This is the first notebook for me. 

    How are you?

    I'd like to introduce myself.
    My name is Juri Mizuki. I'm from Japan. So I live in Sendai, a city north of Tokyo, but I was born in Aomori. Do you know there where that is? (That is a more natural way to ask if the person knows your home city, though you could also say "Do you know about Aomori?".)
    Aomori is close to Hokkaido.
    Hokkaido is the northern island of Japan. ("Hokkaido is north of Japan" means that Hokkaido is not in Japan, but to the north of it, like ユジノサハリンスク!)

    So you can understand about this place if you see the map.

    You can understand about Hokkaido by looking at a map.

    -or-

    You can work out where Aomori is by looking at a map.

    I belong to a pharmaceutical university, 3rd grade. I am a freshman . And I majoring in pharmacy. All pharmacy students must spend for 6 years to learning about pharmacy details.
    We have to go to school for a longer time than another students.
    My most favorite subject is Physiology. I hate organic chemistry :(
    It is so difficult.

    Now, I'm working part-time at STARBUCKS COFFEE JAPAN an the part time

    Because I like coffee so much, I love Starbucks!
    I especially like caffe Verona. The dark roasts beans are very delicious.

    If you don't know STARBUCKS, you should google it. (In English, 'google' is now also a verb meaning "to search with google")
    I have that this company is become loved from over the world's people.

    I have heard that the company is loved by people from all over the world.

    Oh, it is so late now. I have to go to bed.

    As a result Anyway, ('Anyway' is often used when changing back from a tangent to the main conversation) I'm going to study abroad from next year.
    I will go to California :)
    I have to study English so hard. I have to study really hard to improve my English.
    Please tell me if you have a Facebook or Skype. (Sure thing! I have Facebook - www.facebook.com/daniel.bamford)
    I want to talk with you and I can teach you Japanese language for you.
    I'm looking forward to talking to you soon!

    Thank you.

     

     


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    Hey guys!

    Hello every one! This is the first notebook for me (From me).
    How are you?

    I'd like to introduce about me.
    My name is juri mizuki. I'm from Japan. So I live in Sendai what city northern Tokyo.
    But I was born in Aomori. Do you know there (it)?
    Aomori is close to Hokkaido.
    Hokkaido (What is Hokkaido) is at(in) north of Japan. 

    So you can understand about this place if you see tha map.

    I belong to the pharmaceutical university grade 3rd.I am fresh man.
    And I majoring pharmacy. All pharmacy student to spent for 6 years to learn about pharmacy detail.
    We have to go to school for a long time than another student.
    My most favorite Subject is physiology. I hate organic chemistry :(
    It is so difficult. Now,I'm working STARBUCKS COFFEE JAPAN as the part time.
    Because I like coffee so much,I love Starbucks!
    Especially i like caffe Verona.this dark roasts beans is very delicious.

    If you don't know STARBUCKS,you should search with on google. 
    I have that this company is become loved from over the world's people.

    Oh,it is so late now.i have to go to bed.

    As a result,I'm going to study abroad since next year.
    I will go to California :)
    I have to study English so hard.
    Please tell me,If you have a facebook or skype.
    I want to talk with you and I can teach Japanese language for you.
    I'm looking for ward(forward) to talk you soon!

    Thank you



    yeah man ,,n ice keep it up .
    you'll learn English.

    Hey there! nice to meet you! I'll actually be in Tokyo this summer, working with youth from Sendai. Here're some corrections- if you want, i can do more :)

     

    Hey guys!

    Hello every one! This is the first notebook for me. my first notebook entry.
    How are you?

    I'd like to introduce about me. myself
    My name is juri mizuki. I'm from Japan. So I live in Sendai what city northern Tokyo. Sendai, a city north of Tokyo,
    But I was born in Aomori. Do you know there of it?
    Aomori is close to Hokkaido. which Hokkaido is north of Japan.

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