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This is how I would write it:
Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs.
When I was a child, I listened to a lot of children's story in my Mother tongue. 23 years later, I became a grown woman and I thought that maybe one day when I become a mother, I would tell fairytales to my children. The book of fairytales in Viet Nam is translated from a foreign book which was written by Grimm. At this moment, I am reading an original fairytale story to study English. The first children's story book that I read was called "Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs". It was a interesting book which was seperated into eight chapters and ended with a happy ending. There were a lot of new words that I do not usually meet in everyday conversation. Now, I am going to summarize the whole story by my own words. I am also going to use the vocabulary and the structure that I met in this book.
The story began with once upon a time, in the middle of winter, there was a kind and beautiful queen who wassewing beside a window frame. That year, flakes of snow were failing like feathers from the sky. Whilst she was absorbed to little white snow, she didn’t focus on sewing , she pricked her finger with the needle. She had soon a little daughter who was white as snow, her lips were as red as blood and her hair was as black as ebony. Therefore, her mother called her for Little Snow White. But when the child was born, the queen died. The king remarried with an evil queen after once a year had passed. The new queen was a person who always felt green with envy, especially in beauty. She didn't want anybody to be more beautiful than her. She was willing to use power and witchcraft to harm them.
When Snow White was a little girl, she was so cute. When she grew up, she was going to the fairest in this land. She was seven years old and super innocent . Some beautiful day, when the evil queen knew that Snow White was in the fairest in this land, she asked for a pair of glasses that she could looked where Snow White was. She felt extremely angry and wanted to kill her. Then the tension in the story began with the chase of Snow White and her hidden life for the evil queen. I will continue my writing later. Thanks for reading and fixing!
Hopefully this helped! Your English isn't not bad, keep your good work up! :)
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