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Essay - The Environment Problems (part 2 - NOT FINISHED!) Animals can mistake litter for food. By throwing litter in the litter can, and stop using household cleaning products that do not contain harmful chemicals, will save many animals and the environment. If not, some litter will stay around for thousands of years! Instead of taking the car, use your bicycle or take the shoelace express. Similarly, travelling with planes cause more emission than cars, however, travel once a year aboard instead of two or three times will reduce a lot of CO2 emission. In conclusion, maintaining the environment benefits for present generation and future generations. It allows future generation to grow. Everything needs time. I hope that great solutions will occur in the immediate future. I am sure our grandchildren will not thank us if we do not do anything to change it. Because we will be the first specie who managed to kill our own specie.
Sep 24, 2013 6:32 PM
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Essay - The Environment Problems (part 2 - NOT FINISHED!)

Animals can mistake litter for food. By throwing litter in the litter can (trash can, rubbish bin), and by not using household cleaning products that contain harmful chemicals, you will save many animals and help the environment. If you don't, some litter will stay around for thousands of years!
Instead of taking your car, ride your bicycle or take the shoelace express. Similarly, travelling by plane causes more CO2 emission than travelling by car, however, by travelingl once a year abroad instead of two or three times will reduce a lot of CO2 emission.
In conclusion, maintaining the environment benefits the present generation and future generations. It allows future generation to grow. Everything needs time. I hope that great solutions will be discovered in the immediate future. I am sure our grandchildren will not thank us if we do not do anything to change the situation. Otherwise, ours will be the first species that managed to kill itself.

 

Remember that every sentence needs a subject and that over using a pronoun (in this case 'it') can lead to confusion. 

 

 

April 17, 2014

Essay - The Environment Problems (part 2 - NOT FINISHED!)

Animals could mistakenly use litter as a food. By stop throwing litter away, and by curbing the use of harmful household cleaning products , we would save many animals and environment. 
In order to reduce pollution, use of bicycles or commuting through public transport instead of cars are enviormnt friendly options. Similarly, air travel cause more emission of green house gasses, however, less air travel would reduce CO2 emission and positively effect enviornment.
In conclusion, maintaining a healthy environment not only benefit present population of this planet but also vital for suvival of future generations. Althoug this is a time consuming process but not impossible, every cloud has a silver lining and every problem has a solution. Our comming genrations appriciate our efforts, if we will  pass on the legacy of clean and healthy living enviornment to them. 

 

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Great effort and exellent ideas. Try to aviod repetition and variate sentence structure. You also run out of vocabulary. You could easily over come these problems just try to read lot of stuff in english.I am also english learner 

April 17, 2014
incorrect:It allows future generation to grow. correct: It allows to grow for future generation incorrect: travelling with planes cause more emission than cars
September 25, 2013
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