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Second letter to my Cutie Pie
I'm currently trying to improve my writing skills, so I wrote this for my gf. Please feel free to correct it. That evening I was walking down the street when I saw a couple wigging out... (to me "wigging out" is like "freaking out" or "going mad", so I am not sure what you mean here)I tried not to look at them as if they were supposed to exist in that moment in my destiny and I wouldn't get into trouble changing the story. I left that street and got onto the metro. As I was going downstairs to take the last train home, I started reviewing my thoughts of that day, and finally found something that I wrote down in red. It was your name.. I knew that my brain would delete everything that it considers not to be really essental.. But I kinda knew that it won't delete that vital data for my existence. That night, a question popped up out of nowhere... I didnt know her, and I knew that I was really paranoid for asking myself that question over and over.. I kept thinking to myself, "FIrst things first... first things first" I was really afraid that she wouldn't take me seriously.... It was something that really intrigued me deep inside. Not like those questions about what is the pinky toe's function? But more like, What If I cuddle up in her arms to be there forever and then I look to the ground and then, that ground below us never really existed, all of it was just pure and false hope. ("false hope" sounds like a negative thing to me, while the situation seems really like a positive dream-state. I think "just pure fantasy" or "just an illusion" would be a better phrasing.)
Very nice writing. You have a very good writing style!
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