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Love story

I tried to reach you heart, but all my attemps have been in vane.

With pain in my heart, I'm watching you while you're packing your stuff.
The tears in my eyes betrayed me, so I didn't want than you saw me crying.

There is no a hint of doubt, everything is over between us.
It must have been love, but it was only a big lie.

All I wanted was to break your wall and enter in your world, but insteed of that you wrecked me.

In spite of everything, I will always love you.

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    Love story

    I tried to reach your heart, but all my attempts have been in vain.

    With pain in my heart, I'm watching you while you're packing your stuff(things is a better word to use here...but stuff is understandable).
    The tears in my eyes betrayed me;  I didn't want you to see me me crying.

    There is no a hint of doubt, everything is over between us.
    It must(could would be a good word to talk about potential) have been love, but now it seems it was only a big lie.

     

    (Depending on what you want to say, you could also say: It seemed like love, but it was only a big lie. That would mean that love never really existed)

    All I wanted was to break down your wall and enter into your world, but instead of that you wrecked (destroyed is a better word) me.

    In spite of everything(you could add that happened here, but you don't need to), I will always love you.

     

    Bien hecho!

    Love story

    I tried to reach you heart, but all my attemps have been in vane.

    With pain in my heart, I'm watching you while you're packing your stuff ["things" is a better word than "stuff"in this context.]
    The tears in my eyes betrayed me, so I didn't want than you saw to see me crying.

    There is not a hint of doubt, everything is over between us.
    It must have been love, but now it seems it was only a big lie.

    All I wanted was to break your wall down and enter into your world, but insteed of that you've wrecked destroyed me.

    In spite of everything, I will always love you.

     

     

    esto estaba muy triste, es verdad? ......o es un cancion?

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