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These days the media is full of stories about famous Peruvian or international people and that gives everyday people the impression that being famous in Peru is easy.
Good looks, the perfect smile and a nice body, sound like the perfect recipe for fame and if you have these attributes, you will surely be admitted into the glitz and glamour of Chollybood and in no time at all you'll be making more money than you could ever dream of. Great examples of this are Nicola Porcella and Mario Hart, two guys who, in a blink of an eye were launched into the limelight through just being contestants on game shows.
To stay in the spotlight, however, demands being in the public-eye constantly. The easiest way to achieve this is either, 1) be part of an scandal or 2) expose your entire life. An example of this is Susy Diaz, who exposes her entire life and dignity for very little money.
On balance, I believe that being famous in Peru is really difficult and if you want a successful career, a career which lasts more than 5 minutes, then you will require dedication, hardwork and above all, geniune talent.

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These days the media is full of stories about famous Peruvian or international people, in fact all these people give us an idea that being famous in Peru could be easy .
Having a Being good looking, having aperfect smile and nice body , sounds like the perfect recipe to be famous, if you have these attributes , you will be admitted in achieve instant success in Chollybood Hollywood easily and you will earn a razonable quantity reasonable amount of money , great examples of these this are Nicola Porcella or  and Mario Hart, two guys that in just one instant had been launched to the fame through game shows.
however, staying in the spotlight of the viewers, demanding do things work continously , the most is the easiest way to reach it  success. Nowadays: being part of an scandal, showing sharing your personal life , examples such as Susy diaz who expose shared her entire personal life and lost her your human dignity for a little bit of money.
On balance (?), I believe that being famous in Peru is really difficult and if you want your a career to keep in the spotlight more than last beyond 5 minutes of fame, that it requires dedication and more than nothing love for yourself .

Great job expressing your opinions, Ingrid! Good luck with your English studies.

Alex:)