Lisa
I read my English textbook. Please teach me whether I mistake my English pronunciation and grammar. ≪sentences≫ I traveled into a space three times. Each time I rediscovered my love for the earth. The ISS takes 90 minutes to fly around the earth. For 45 minutes you see the day view, and then in the next 45 minutes you see the night view. It is very dark at night. The stars are shining. The Milky Way stretches on and on. Our blue planet Earth looks like an oasis in the vastness of space. 《日本語訳(文章のところは省略)≫ 私は自分の英語の教科書を読み上げました。 発音や文法でどこに間違いがあるか、指摘していただけると嬉しいです。
Jul 5, 2014 9:46 PM
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November 23, 2014
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November 22, 2014

I read my English textbook.

Please teach me whether correct I my mistakes my in English pronunciation and grammar.

≪sentences≫
I have traveled into a space three times. Each time, I rediscovered my love for the Earth. The ISS takes 90 minutes to fly around the Earth. For the first 45 minutes, you see the day view, and then in the next 45 minutes, you see the night view. It is very dark at night. The stars are shining. The Milky Way stretches on and on. Our blue planet Earth looks like an oasis in amid the vastness of space.

《日本語訳(文章のところは省略)≫
私は自分の英語の教科書を読み上げました。
発音や文法でどこに間違いがあるか、指摘していただけると嬉しいです。

 

<em>What a lovely piece, Lisa! Just remember that "Earth" is capitalized when referring to our planet. "earth" is a synonym of "soil" and "dirt". :)</em>

July 6, 2014

I read my English textbook.

Please teach me whether I mistake my English pronunciation and grammar.

≪sentences≫
I have traveled into space three times (now). Each time, I rediscovered my love for Earth. The ISS takes 90 minutes to fly around the earth. For 45 minutes you see the day view, and then in the next 45 minutes you see the night view. It is very dark at night. The stars are shining. The Milky Way stretches on and on. Our blue planet Earth looks like an oasis in the vastness of space.

<em>All in all, not many corrections actually needed.  It generally makes sense, but if you would like a better flow or more flavour you could change or rewrite it to:</em>

 

I have now traveled into space three times. Each and every time, I rediscovered my love for Earth. The ISS takes 90 minutes to fly around the earth.  And for 45 minutes you see the day view, and then in the next 45 minutes you see the night view. It is very dark at night but the stars are shining. The Milky Way seems to stretch on and on. Our blue planet Earth looks like an oasis in the vastness of space.

 

<em>You've got really good imagery and imagination in this paragraph.  Well done!</em>

July 6, 2014

 

I have traveled into space three times. Each time I had rediscovered my love for the Earth. The ISS takes 90 minutes to orbit the Earth. For 45 minutes you see the day view, and then the next 45 minutes you see the night view. The stars shine in the dark night. The Milky Way stretches on and on. Our blue planet Earth looks like an oasis in the vastness of space.

Overall, a very well done notebook, I like the use of imagery. Good job and keep it up! Message me if you would like to be conversation partners.

July 5, 2014
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