Isabella Thompson
Writing about watching a basketball match with friends. 大家好, Sorry long time no see! 最近我很忙。做很多学习 as was coming up to my exams! love to chat to you all! Please would you be so kind as to check my email to a Chinese friend about my daily routine and weekend. Thank you so much! (^.^) 谢谢你们! 我不喜欢很多运动,可是我爱打篮球。我打得不错,但是我没有我的朋友Carly那么好。她打篮球打得可好了!Carly是我们学校篮球女队的队长。她跑得很快,比男队的队长快! (she runs so fast, faster than the captain of my schools male basketball team!) 上个月,她请我去篮球比赛因为我们都是球迷。她告诉我新西兰队跟悉尼的Kings队。我说“当然了!” 所以我们去了。那天晚上我们从学校坐公共汽车去城市。下车以后,Carly说“我希望今晚不会下雨。” 我们都没有雨伞所以几步。(neither of us had an umbrella so we walked quickly) 到了Vector Arena体育场,我们去买两张票。 那晚场上观众多极了。比赛很激烈。上半场了,两个队还没有进!我们觉得新西兰队不会赢因为他们没有那么悉尼队强。下半场,新西兰打得可好了。最后,我们新西兰队一比零赢了悉尼的Kings。我们和新西兰球迷非常高兴。 现在,我和Carly看新西兰队一定比澳大利亚队好。(now, Carly and I think the New Zealand basketball team is better than Australian team!)
Jul 11, 2014 4:56 AM
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 你好,我是li li, 来自北京。很高兴看到你的文章。很有逻辑,很不错的经历。不过有的时候句子不够完整,也有不准确的地方。我做了一些修改,希望我们可以相互交流。(Your article is logicle, and it is a very nice experience. Just sometimes there are some parts lack in the sentence, or some small mistakes there. I made some corrections, hope we can communicate and help each other!)

 


我不喜欢很多运动,可是我爱打篮球。我打得不错,但是没有我的朋友Carly打得那么好。她打篮球打得可好了!Carly是我们学校篮球女队的队长。她跑得很快,比男队的队长快! (she runs so fast, faster than the captain of my schools male basketball team!)

上个月,她请我去篮球比赛因为我们都是球迷。她告诉我参加比赛的是新西兰队跟悉尼的Kings队。我说“当然了!”

所以我们去了。那天晚上我们从学校坐公共汽车去城市。下车以后,Carly说“我希望今晚不会下雨。” 我们都没有雨伞所以很快走(neither of us had an umbrella so we walked quickly) 到了Vector Arena体育场,我们去买两张票。

那晚场上观众多极了。比赛很激烈。上半场快结束了,两个队还没有进!我们觉得新西兰队不会赢因为他们没有那么悉尼队强。下半场,新西兰打得可好了。最后,我们新西兰队一比零赢了悉尼的Kings。我们和新西兰球迷非常高兴。 


现在,我和Carly认为新西兰队一定比澳大利亚队好。(now, Carly and I think the New Zealand basketball team is better than Australian team!)

July 11, 2014
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做很多学习(功课whick is a noun.学习It is a verb.) (^.^) 


上个月,她请我去(看)篮球比赛因为我们都是球迷。她告诉我新西兰队跟悉尼的Kings队(比赛)。我说“当然(可以)了!”

所以我们去了。那天晚上我们从学校坐公共汽车去城市。下车以后,Carly说“我希望今晚不会下雨。” 我们都没有(带)雨伞所以(走)几步。(neither of us had an umbrella so we walked quickly) 到了Vector Arena体育场,我们去买(了)两张票。

那晚场上观众多极了。比赛很激烈。(过了)上半场了,两个队还没有进!我们觉得新西兰队不会赢因为他们没有悉尼队强。
现在,(以)我和Carly(来看)新西兰队一定比澳大利亚队好。(now, Carly and I think the New Zealand basketball team is better than Australian team!)

 

Dear Isabella Thompson,

You are a good student! Hope you learn better by better. Have a nice day!

 

Joyce

July 11, 2014
你的中文不错,虽然语序不是很正确,但是能让人懂。我很愿意帮助你学习中文,因为我希望成为一个教外国人中文的老师。我的英文不是很好,也希望得到你的帮助。your Chinese is good,although the word order is not very correct ,people can understand.I'd love to help you to learn Chinese,because l wanna become a teacher to teach foreigners Chinese.my English is not good,l hope you can help me,thanks
July 12, 2014
Thanks Amy Zhang
July 11, 2014
Your Chinese writing is pretty good.加油!而且你好像很喜欢用“可好了”这个词,哈哈。非常不错。
July 11, 2014
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