Story 7/22/2014 After months' of hunting, the infamous pickpocket, John, was finally had his collar felt by the detective. The elated detective issue a penalty to John, a fine of 100 dollar pounds.

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Story 7/22/2014 After months' of hunting, the infamous pickpocket, John, was finally had his collar felt by the detective. The elated detective issue a penalty to John, a fine of 100 dollar pounds. John dug into his pocket and go through it. Unfortunately he could only produce 80 pounds. John shrugged and handed over his only 80 pounds reluctantly to the detective, and said, "Well, sorry there are the only money I have." The detective was vexed. After a moment of silence, he frowned and said unwillingly, "I will release you for 3 hours, Please come back within the time period and pay up the full penalty charge."

Jul 22, 2014 4:36 PM

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Story 7/22/2014

After months of hunting, the infamous pickpocket John was finally caught had his collar felt by the detective.
The elated detective issued a penalty to John - a fine of 100 dollar pounds.
John dug into his pocket to see if there was anything in and go through it. Unfortunately he could only produce 80 pounds.
John shrugged and reluctantly handed over his only 80 pounds reluctantly to the detective and said "Well, Sorry, there are the only this is all the money I have."
The detective was vexed. After a moment of silence, he frowned and unwillingly said unwillingly, "I will release you for 3 hours, please come back within the time period and pay up the full penalty charge."

Good!

-I have moved the adverbs "reluctantly" and "unwillingly" to a more common position. What you had written did sort of make sense, but it read in a strange way. Sometimes it's best to stick to what you know is correct - with the adverb coming before the verb it relates to

-Don't use a capital letter after a comma

-Money is an uncountable noun in English and we therefore say much money. Coins and notes, however, are countable nouns and we can have many coins and many notes.

July 22, 2014

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