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IELTS writing task 2 answer (6) (how to measure the success of a country) Question: Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others? Answer The discussion of how to define successful countries has triggered a worldwide controversy. I would argue that economic development should not be regarded as the main criterion to assess a country, while other factors should be taken into consideration. One significant factor is whether a nation’s wealth is distributed relatively evenly. Even if some nations’ economic is booming, poor people there do not benefit from this development, on the contrary, the gap between haves and have-nots is widening. This means the majority of wealth in such countries is swallowed up by a few personages, while a huge proportion of the population cannot even afford food, housing and health care service. Another essential feature of a successful country is an integrated education system. This is based on the fact that education is the key to bridging the gap between rich and poor and thus curb uncertainty to social stability. Therefore successful nations should be the ones who pool resources to upgrade educational facilities, recruit well-qualified lecturers and maybe even offer free education so as to further economic and social development, because productivity will be improved and citizens’ morals will be strengthened. In my opinion, the most vital element that makes a successful countries is that the economic development is sustainable. Many developing areas achieve tremendous GDP at environment’s expense. They are drying up their natural resources in order to gain substantial immediate interests without considering the well-being of their future generations, who would receive nothing more than exhausted lands and unbreathable air and fall back to be poverty-stricken. Such self-destructive way of development should not be considered successful. In conclusion, it is unreasonable to equate wealth with success. Other factors like equal distribution of wealth, education and sustainable development should be taken into consideration when evaluating a nation’s success.
Jul 23, 2014 11:11 AM
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IELTS writing task 2 answer (6) (how to measure the success of a country)

Question:

Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?


Answer

The discussion of how to define successful countries has triggered a worldwide controversy. I would argue that economic development should not be regarded as the main criterion to assess a country, while other factors should be taken into consideration.

One significant factor is whether a nation’s wealth is relatively evenly distributed. Even if the economy of some nations’ economic is booming, poor people there do not benefit from this development. Oon the contrary, the gap between haves and have-nots is widening. This means that the majority of wealth in such countries is swallowed up by a few personages, while a huge proportion of the population cannot even afford food, housing and health care service.

Another essential feature of a successful country is an integrated education system. This is based on the fact that education is the key to bridging the gap between rich and poor and thus curb uncertainty to social stability. Therefore successful nations should be the oneswho which pool resources to upgrade their educational facilities, recruit well-qualified lecturers and maybe even offer free education so as to further improve economic and social development, because of which productivity will be improved and the citizen's morals morale will be strengthened.

In my opinion, the most vital element that makes a successful countries is that the its sustainable economic development is . Many developing areas achieve tremendous GDP at environment’s expense. They are drying up their natural resources in order to gain substantial immediate interests without considering the well-being of their future generations, who would receive nothing more than exhausted lands and unbreathable air and fall back to be poverty-stricken. Such self-destructive way of development should not be considered successful.

In conclusion, it is unreasonable to equate wealth with success. Other factors like equal distribution of wealth, education and sustainable development should be taken into consideration when evaluating a nation’s success.

 

A good task. Be cautious with the punctuations. As in IELTS and Toeic, the evaluator will also look into your ability to punctuate the sentences.

 

All the Best.

 

Chait

July 23, 2014
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