dairy:7.23

After several days' work,I am truly tried.
I became a volunteer of SEE (a most influential NGO in China) volunteer several days ago. At first I am was very glad to be a member of SEE for because our group (3 members) is planning setting to set u<em>p (because of the planning to ...)</em> a social enterprise. It sounds nice to set Setting up an enterprise sounds nice/interesting to me for I am a freshman of at university. I wonder whether there are is another Bill arising (ahhhh)??? (<em>no idea what this means!)</em>. But after several days' work, my dream was broken! All of last week, I am was making a Powerpoint document for my leader. I had modified it more than 10 times! But yesterday he actually rejected my work and order instructed me to do another work task/assignment for him. Oh no!

(first time to writing on italki~)

dairy:7.23  Diary - dairy is where cows' milk is made into butter and cheese!  :) 

After several days' work,I am truly tried tired.
I become became a volunteer of SEE (a most influential NGO in China) several days ago. At first I am was very glad to be a member of SEE, for because our group (3 members) is planning setting to set up a social enterprise. It sounds nice good ('nice' is ok, but 'good' sounds better) to set up a enterprise for I am a freshman of university (not quite sure what you mean in this sentence). I wondered whether there are was another Bill arising(ahhhh) [I don't understand this, sorry.]. But then, after several days' work, my dream breaks was shattered! All of last week, I am was making a powerpoint for my leader. I have had modified it more than 10 times! But yesterday he actually rejected my work and ordered me to do another work job for him. Oh no!

(first time to write I have written on italki~)

Well done, and welcome!  I think you have written this all in the present tense - your next step could be to find out about past tense verbs.  When writing, you need to leave a space after most punctuation marks (but brackets are a bit different).  It will make your writing magically look much more fluent!  :)