What a Small World!

I hugged Chris and said goodbye to him. [Good line and beginning to a story!]

I would be meeting another friend later on at 4pm in Alexanderplatz. Then it was my first time in Berlin. I did not know my way well. The strange streets were so disorienting to me. However, with the help of some friendly locals, I finally arrived at the Alaxanderplatz station with no further problem. I sighed with relief. No longer would I have to be in a hurry as I walked out of the subway station to enjoy a sunny Saturday. Tourists from all over the wolrd world must have been here, so I thought. There were so many exotic looks.

As I was passing by a bus station, I saw many waiting for the bus. As I nonchalantly glanced at the crowd once more... Wait! Who was that woman? Have I ever seen her somewhere before? She looked so familiar and yet so unacquainted.  I stopped dead in my tracks and started furiously to recall the dusty banks of my memories... Ahhh, so it was!  Yezi, it is! I recognized her now as a smile bursting out in my face like a flower on a sunny day.

Who is she?

I do not have a blog but am interested in reading stories and articles of others on the internet. Then one day, I stumbled into the blog of some lady. Her writing style and choice of word are so fascinating. Since then, I visit her blog from time to time. Alas, she has no idea at all, that somewhere out in the big blue yonder, there is a big fan like me awaiting for her opening doors to let us into her world. From her posts, I knew she lives in Munich with German husband and yes, from this wonderful union, they were blessed with two lovely exotic-looking kids.

As I approached her, with each step I became surer and surer that she is Yezi! Then I blurted out her name to say hello. She was so suprised that her name and even her children's name were uttered from the mouth of a total stranger! I was very excited too. Then I explained her how I knew them. She was so glad to have met me in person. She also told me that she had seen me walking by too. She thought I was a girl from some place like Thailand! Nary a thought entered her mind that I was from China too. , and before Until this chance meeting of today, we had not even one connection never talked to each other. But we It is just destiny that we met in this way in far away Berlin. She told me, that her family was they were having holidays here in Berlin. And as for me, I was about to leave the next day after this day. Such a conincidence! Was it not it? Nay! I say it is the machinations of Fate!

Indeed, What a small world it is!

Excellent writing.  You have the structure and thoughts flowing nicely from paragraph to another. However, as you can see from my style, I used as much as past continuous tense as possible to make the reader feel that your past is happening right now in front of their eyes.  Also you see how I added extra words to make the piece interesting and warm.  You do this only to creative writing. This is why writing and reading a report is so boring.

You can become a good writer if you worked harder.  Need to have a larger vocabulary of words and idiomatic expressions though.  Don't be afraid to euphemisms in your writing!  I really enjoy your reading and correcting your writing.  Excellent work!