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Could you please correct outline of my engineering research ?(conjunction,contents,words,etc..) Recent urbanization has been making building-induced wind grow. Fortunately, there is method in order to reduce the building-induced wind by building shape optimization. Before the optimization, the behavior of controlled object (wind) needs to be measured. In this phase, the more precise result we can get, the more proper the system would be controlled. Therefore, new designed hear-type anemometer was developed to contribute the phase by new device’s feature “high time and space resolution”. The measurement principle of wind direction is as follows. The sensor consists of a hot-wire anemometer and plural thermocouples. Plural thermocouples are positioned in a circle and hot-wire anemometer (CCA) is positioned at the center of the circle. When the wind blows, CCA heats the downstream thermocouples. This enables to determine wind direction and velocity magnitude is simply detected by the center of the CCA.
Jul 24, 2014 6:09 AM
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Could you please correct this outline of my engineering research ?(conjunction,contents,words,etc..)

Recent urbanization has been making building-induced wind grow more prevalent. Fortunately, there is a method in order that reduces the building-induced wind by utilizing shape optimization. However, before the optimization, the behavior of the controlled object (the wind) needs to be measured. In this phase, the more precise the result we can get, the more properly the system can/will be controlled. Therefore, a newly designed audio-based anemometer was developed to aid in this phase by this phase by increasing “temporal and spatial resolution.”In most scientific fields they say “high temporal (time) and spatial (space) resolution. – If you can alter the quote you might want to change those terms.

"The measurement principle of wind direction is as follows." (The measurement principles of wind direction are outlined below.) The sensor consists of a hot-wire anemometer and plural thermocouples. The plural thermocouples are positioned in a circle, and the hot-wire anemometer (CCA) is positioned at the center of the circle. When the wind blows, the CCA heats the downstream thermocouples. This enables the determination of wind direction and velocity. Magnitude is simply detected by the center of the CCA.

 

Needed some articles.

There are some phrases that are not wrong grammatically; they just don't sound standard to me. - I did not alter these.

I put "more prevalent", but I was not exactly sure what you wanted to say so you might need to adjust that. 

Using a conjuction instead of a preposition provides some variety to make sentences more euphonic. 

Hearing tends to be reserved by living or animated objects.

Prior-mentioned information - the phase becomes this phase.

Most engineers use the terms I outlined above.

As follows tends to be followed by a colon and have an formally outlined process.


Those are just some of the things I noticed. If you need something else explained just ask. 

July 24, 2014
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Could you please correct the outline of my engineering research ?(conjunction,contents,words,etc..)

 

Recent urbanization has been making building-induced wind grow stronger. Fortunately, there is a method in order to reduce the building-induced wind by building ("utilizing shape optimization") shape optimization. Before the optimization, the behavior of the controlled object (wind) needs to be measured. In this phase, the more precise result we can get, the more properly (adverb because "properly" describes the verb "controlled") the system would be controlled. Therefore, newly (adverb) designed hear-type anemometer was developed to contribute to the phase by new device’s feature called “high time and space resolution”.

The measurement principle of wind direction is as follows. The sensor consists of a hot-wire anemometer and plural thermocouples. Plural thermocouples are positioned in a circle and hot-wire anemometer (CCA) is positioned at the center of the circle. When the wind blows, CCA heats the downstream thermocouples. This enables the determination of to determine wind direction and velocity. Magnitude is simply detected by the center of the CCA.

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