IELTS Writing Task 1 Practice Task 6, Correct it Please You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to • ex

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IELTS Writing Task 1 Practice Task 6, Correct it Please You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to • explain the reason why you decline the offer • express you gratitude • explain you like your current job very much You should write at least 150 words. Dear Sir, I am writing in response of your offer letter, I am unable to join you company because of several reasons, first is that there is not much difference between my current salary and the salary you offers, second thing is that your office is very far from my home which consumes too much time in travelling, third and most important thing is that after two or three months I will get promotion due to which I will start getting more benefits. I am really thankful to your company that they gives me the offers, I appreciate that. I apologise if your time is wasted in the arrangement of my interview and documentation you done. I am happy with my current job, we have here friendly environment, my colleagues are very cooperative, here my boss is kind with the staff not putting any pressure on us. Sincerely yours Awais

Jul 24, 2014 11:34 AM

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IELTS Writing Task 1 Practice Task 6, Correct it Please

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to
• explain the reason why you decline the offer
• express you gratitude
• explain you like your current job very much
You should write at least 150 words.

Comment #1: grammar problems are fairly small, which is a good thing. Be careful not to have one sentence that goes on forever. You need to break your ideas up into individual sentences. If you want to have more than one idea in a sentence, then make sure you're using conjunctions to connect the ideas together. (more than 'and', 'but', 'because', 'so')

Comment #2: Don't forget to clearly identify your paragraphs. They should have either an empty line or be indented

Comment #3: Be careful about the tone of the words and topics that you select. Usually money is only spoken about indirectly in Western cultures. It also wouldn't be appropriate to tell the job you interviewed for that you're going to wait for a promotion at your current job instead. ;)
This wouldn't keep you from a 6, but it would keep you in the lower end of the 6 band.

Dear Sir,
I am writing in response of to your offer letter, I am unable to join you company because of several reasons. The first is that there is not much difference between my current salary and the salary you have offersed. The second thing is that your office is very far from my home which will consumes too much time in travelling. Third third and the most important thing is that after two or three months, I will get promotion, due to which so I will start getting more benefits.

I am really thankful to that your company offered me a positionthat they gives me the offers, I appreciate that. I apologise if your time is was wasted in the arrangement of my interview and documentation that you have done.

I am happy with my current job, we have here a friendly environment, my colleagues are very cooperative, here and my boss is kind with to the staff. He does not putting any pressure on us.

Sincerely yours
Awais