An IELTS Essay: please help me with corrections. thanks a lot

(Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.)

There is a debate over whether tourists must should keep doing their own cultural behaviors or follow the host country’s culture and attitudes.
Some people argue that visitors must should follow local customs and behavior, because if a tourist country having with many visitors allows travelers to do as they believe as follow their own cultural norms, younger people could be affected by them, and as a result, it is possible that some of the host country’s culture would change by over [or with] time. Besides, they say that accepting different cultural behaviors could be difficult for local people to deal with. In addition, some cultural behaviors of tourists could cross the upset local religions. For example, in an Islamic country like Iran, shaking hands with a person of the opposite sex different gender is not acceptable, so local people cannot ignore their religion and behavior to cope with tourists. and this In this instance it is tourists who have to follow the local culture and behavior.
Some other people believe that visitors are guests and should be welcomed with their unique beliefs, as they believe as norms, and cultures. Therefore, this it is the host country’s duty to allow them to keep doing their own cultures and behavior. A tourist country earns money by from tourists, so respecting them is a vital key to improve the country's image as a tourist destination. touristic one. However, learning about different cultures and behavior could be promoted to benefit the country's tourist industry. a good point to succeed in tourist industry and having a promoted behavior.
In my opinion, both these views could be are true to some extent. On the one hand, there are some cultural behaviors which have to be respected by visitors, one the other hand, tourists have to enjoy their travels so expecting them to follow all the host country’s behavior and culture is not reasonable.

318 words. You could use more synonyms, and fewer repetitiions of "culture and behavior."

There is a debate over whether tourist must should keep doing their own cultural behavior or follow the host country’s culture and attitudes.
Some people argue that visitors must should follow local customs and behavior, because if a tourist country having with many visitors allows travelers to do as they believe as follow their own cultural norms, younger people could be affected by them, and as a result, it is possible that some of the host country’s culture would change by over [or with] time. Besides, they say that accepting different cultural behaviors could be difficult for local people to deal with. In addition, some cultural behaviors of tourists could cross the upset local religions. For example, in an Islamic country like Iran, shaking hands with a person of the opposite sex different gender is not acceptable, so local people cannot ignore their religion and behavior to cope with tourists. and this In this instance it is tourists who have to follow the local culture and behavior.
Some other people believe that visitors are guests and should be welcomed with their unique beliefs, as they believe as norms, and cultures. Therefore, this it is the host country’s duty to allow them to keep doing their own cultures and behavior. A tourist country earns money by from tourists, so respecting them is a vital key to improve the country's image as a tourist destination. touristic one. However, learning about different cultures and behavior could be promoted to benefit the country's tourist industry. a good point to succeed in tourist industry and having a promoted behavior.
In my opinion, both these views could be are true to some extent. On the one hand, there are some cultural behaviors which have to be respected by visitors, one the other hand, tourists have to enjoy their travels so expect them to follow all the host country’s behavior and culture is not reasonable.