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Hi, I am Rocio and i live in Argentina. I am 15 years old and my birthday is in September 18. My goal is to improve my english. This is my 3rd year studying English :). I want to learn this lenguage language because in the future I will visit places and i think that english is very important in many accasions occasions. I would like to study portuguese and frances France too. My hobbies are, be with hanging out with my friends and family, play hockey, i love travel and meet see news places. Last year i visited Miami , Orlando and Disney World. This was my a present from my parents for my birthday of 15 years my 15th birthday, in Argentina is an habit give away this travel to girls it is a custom to give a girl a travel opportunity as a gift, but not everyone can access this gift.
I also want to meet new people at meet yours culture, knowledge and more.and learn about your culture. I dont know what else to say. I hope that my post will be many good.
It was a pleasure.

Hola Rocio - I actually love dancing Argentine tango! ..and you're right English is VERY important. I have danced in several countries, and English has been the common tongue shared across borders ..even on the dance floor!

Below I've made changes that make your writing more readable. (Using paragraphs for different groups of thoughts is helpful..) Plus, I re-wrote your ideas in ways that a native speaker would probably write them.

Here are my recommended changes to make your writing just a bit more readable. Nice job by the way - keep at it!

Hi, my name is Rocio, and I live in Argentina. I am 15 years old, and my birthday is on September 18.

My goal here is to improve my English. This is my 3rd year studying English :), and I want to learn this lenguage because in the future I will plan to visit different places and where I think that English is will be very important in on many occasions. I would also like to study Portuguese and French frances too as well.

My hobbies include: spending time be with my friends and family, playing hockey, i love travelling and visiting meet news places.

Last year I visited Miami , Orlando and Disney World. This was my present from my parents for my 15th birthday of 15 years. In Argentina it is an habit custom to give away this travel to girls, but not everyone can access give this gift.

I don't know what else to say, except that I also want to meet new people at meet yours from different cultures, knowledge backgrounds and more. I hope that Hopefully, you  have enjoyed reading my post will be many good. It was a pleasure to share these thoughts with you.

my person

Hi, I am Rocio and I live in Argentina. I am 15 years old and my birthday is in on September 18. My goal is to improve my english. This is my 3rd year studying English :). I want to learn this lenguage language because in the future I will visit places and I think that english is very important in on many accasions. I would like to study portugues and frances French too. My hobbies are being with my friends and family, playing hockey and I love to travel and meet see new places. Last year I visited Miami , Orlando and Disney World. This was my present from my parents for my birthday of 15 years. In Argentina it is a habit give away this travel to girls but not everyone can access this gift.
I also want to meet new people at and meet understand yours culture, knowledge and more. I don't know what else to say. I hope that my post will be many very good.
It was a pleasure

En Inglés, utilizamos 'meet' cuando hablamos de personas o animales :)