One Day

(feel free to correct my mistakes!) ：）

GOD! The weather forecast told me that it would rain today!
I woke up, opened the window, and looked far through the window.

Actually, it wasn't raining. However, I wish it were raining today because it's too hot these days in ShangHai! I turned on the air conditioner, picked up my guitar and practiced the song "Say Something" by A Great Big World. I am so in love with this song, just full of emotion!

Some notes:

1. Only use "!" when necessary (it sounds sort of like you're yelling everything).

2. Always capitalize the first letter of a sentence and names (like the name of a song or band).

3. "full of emotion" is correct. "full of emotions" is unnatural here.

4. Since this is a story about what happened earlier today, you should use past tense verbs. 

Keep up the good work! I also really like the song "Say Something". :)

one day,feel free to correct my mistake!

Oh god! The weather forecast showed that it would rain today!
I woke up
open the window! looked far through the window, 
it was not raining! however, I wish it was, because it's too hot these days in Shanghai!
I turned on the air condition, picked up my Guitar, and practised the song "say something" by (a great big world) I love this song so much, calm and full of emotions!

One day(feel free to correct my mistake! ：）

God! The weather forecast told me that it would rain today!
I waked up and  opened the window,I looked far through the window. Actually it was not raining! However, I wished it would rain today because it's too hot these days in ShangHai!
I turned on the air condition, picked up my guitar and practise the song "say something" by a big great big world(What does this sentense mean?).
I love this song so much, just quite and full of emotions!