Thesedays hot issue in South Korea; tycoon Yoo Byung Eun Associated link : http://koreajoongangdaily.joins.com/news/article/article.aspx?aid=2992476 I dont know how close the relationship between p

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Thesedays hot issue in South Korea; tycoon Yoo Byung Eun Associated link : http://koreajoongangdaily.joins.com/news/article/article.aspx?aid=2992476 I dont know how close the relationship between police and prosecuter is in other countries but at least in my country, South Korea that is horrible. So, eventually this mess freindship resulted in unexpected results;The object they are struggling for is usually exploit. They can't stand seeing the profits going to counterpart. After Sewol disaster broke out, Korean government was trying to arrest conman Yoo Byung Eun and June 12 he was found dead in green plum orchard in Suncheon, not that big city located in southest of Korea. When he was alive, he was related with very misterious happenings like Ou-dae-yaoung atrocity,the accident making about 30civilian suicide. Like his whole misterious life, he remained another mystery, What's the cause of his death. You may dont know exactly why almost whole koreans are now paying deep attention toward his mysterious death. That is a little bit hard to explain but I will try. Sunken Se-wal passanger ship brought over 300passangers's death to their family,relatives,freinds, teachers and more largely to whole korean;most of the victims were high school students on feild trip to JeJu Island. We needed some subject to release their rage; Maybe the thing that I am gonna talk about is related with psychology. Unlike non-creature subject, when we have concrete subject that we can see or touch in person, our rage is even more stronger than we dont have such inanimate object ; I think you know what I am saying. So, Yoo Byung Eun was the one who will suffer the whole pressure from all korean. However,July 22 the press released that he was found dead and his corpse was decomposed almost 80% at that time. People started to doubt that the body is not Yoo's even though FSO(forensic science officer)said the DNAs are accordance with his finger print. Well.. I think not the people can't believe that fact he is dead but just wouldn't believe the fact. Not the proofs are insufficient. The proofs are already enough. Every research results are telling the body is Yoo's

Jul 25, 2014 1:21 PM

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The Sunken sinking of the Se-wal passenger ship brought resulted in over 300passangers's passengers' deaths, bringing sadness to their families, relatives, friends, teachers, and more largely to whole korean Korea as a whole; most of the victims were high school students on field trip to JeJu Island. We needed some subject an outlet to release their our rage; maybe the thing that I am gonna going to talk about is related with to psychology. Unlike non-creature subject, when we have a concrete subject that we can see or touch in person, our rage is even more stronger than when we don't have such inanimate object a thing; I think you know what I am saying. So Therefore, Yoo Byung Eun was is the one who will suffer bear all of the whole pressure blame from all Koreans.

However, on July 22, the press released reported that he was found dead and his corpse was decomposed almost 80% at that time. People have started to doubt that the body is not Yoo's even though the FSO (forensic science officer) said the DNAs are accordance is a match with his finger print. Well... I think not the people can't believe that fact he is dead but just wouldn't believe the fact just don't want to believe it. It is not that the proofs are is insufficient. The proofs are already enough There is enough proof. Every research results are telling the body is Yoo's All results indicate that the body is Yoo's.
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Yeah 효진, I think it's hard to get corrections on long essays like this! It's really not that long, but I personally look for corrections that can be done quickly, and I'm guessing a lot of other people do the same. Also, this correction had to be broken into two parts because of the length. That also makes it difficult.

You might have more luck getting your things corrected if you write shorter pieces! Anyway, you're doing really well. :)

July 27, 2014

Thesedays A Hot Issue These Days in South Korea; Tycoon Yoo Byung Eun

Associated link : http://koreajoongangdaily.joins.com/news/article/article.aspx?aid=2992476

I don't know how close the relationship between police and prosecuter is in other countries but, at least in my country, South Korea, that it is horrible. So, Eventually, this messy freindship relationship resulted in produced unexpected results; the object goal they are struggling striving for is usually exploitative. They can't stand seeing the profits credit going to counterpart their rivals. After the Sewol disaster, broke out, the Korean government was trying to arrest conman con man Yoo Byung Eun and but, on June 12, he was found dead in a green plum orchard in Suncheon, not that big a relatively small city located in southest of Korea. When he was alive, he was related connected with very mysterious happenings like the Ou-dae-yaoung atrocity, the accident making a mass suicide of about 30civilian 30 civilians suicide. Like his whole mysterious life, he remained another his death also remains a mystery. What's What was the cause of his death? You may dont not know exactly why almost whole all Koreans are now paying deep close attention toward to his mysterious death. That It is a little bit hard to explain but I will try.