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An IELTS Essay:technology and culture. please help me with corrections.... thanks so much Question: Is modern technology creating a single world culture? Agree or disagree? It is acknowledged that modern technology has changed many aspects of mankind’ life towards improving the world and having a convenient life. One of those changes caused by modern technology is creating a world having a single culture which is an open subject to discuss. While some people believe that having a single world culture is unacceptable and never happen, others argue that will occur sooner than as people expect. I agree that a world having a single culture is creating to some extent. It can be seen that people are affected by modern technology such as internet and media, for example, in the past indigenous people living in their own areas dressed base on their special culture and tradition. Chinese people have had their traditional style of dressing as well as Indian, but these days their wearing style has changed turning into a global standard style; however, they would keep their cultural dressing and tradition customs. Another good example is English as an international language to can communicate and trade with other people in different countries. To be up-to-date, people and particularly youngest are trying to learn English. Nowadays, youngest are learning English via internet chatting and taking classes with native English speakers allow to know about western culture. Learning English seems to be a communal goal of people contributing them to a similar lifestyle. To conclude, the world is always changing by the achievements of humans. Although people of different kinds of areas having various sorts of culture and tradition keep trying to save their own cultures and traditions, it is not far from imagination to see a world with a single culture modernized by technology.
Jul 28, 2014 12:23 PM
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An IELTS Essay:technology and culture. please help me with corrections.... thanks so much

Question:
Is modern technology creating a single world culture? Agree or disagree?

Modern technology has changed many aspects of our lives by improving the world and making life more convenient. One of those changes caused by modern technology is that it has created a single world culture.  This is open for debate as some may not agree. While some people believe that having a single world culture is unacceptable and will never happen, others argue that it will occur sooner than people expect. I agree that a world having a single culture does exist to some extent. 
It can be seen that people have been affected by modern technology by such as the internet and modern media. One example is that in the past indigenous people living in their own areas dressed base on their culture and traditions. Chinese and Indian people have had their traditional style of dress, but these days they have adopted a modern global style of dress. However, they still keep some of their cultural style of dress and traditional customs.
Another good example is the use of English as an international language to can communicate and trade with other people in different countries. To be up-to-date, people worldwide are starting to learn English very young. Nowadays, young people are learning English via internet classes with native English speakers which also allows them to learn about western culture. Learning English seems to be a communal goal of people to achieve a similar global lifestyle.
  In conclusion, the world is always changing by the achievements of humans. Although people of different areas try to save their own cultures and traditions, it is not far from imagination to see a world with a single culture modernized by technology.

July 28, 2014
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