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How we celebrate Eid Festival in Pakistan (Correct it Please) On the occasion of Eid, people prepare new clothes and buy new sandals (footwear), special new clothes for kids as well, Girls wears new bangles, jewellery and embroidery suits. Early in the day male family member’s offers Eid prayers in the mosque with huge gathering, immediate after Eid prayer people start embrace each other in the mosque along with saying words of congratulations. (Eid Mubarak). After that people start going to their relative’s home to meet and embrace each other, friend’s family and relatives exchange Eid messages. People come to their own home who are working abroad or out of city. People also go to meet those people with whom they not meet in their routine life. Everyone is gather in someone’s home and enjoying like a mini party.
Jul 28, 2014 5:04 PM
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How we celebrate Eid Festival in Pakistan (Correct it please)

For [1] the occasion of Eid, people prepare new clothes and buy new sandals (footwear), and special new clothes for the children as well. Girls wears new bangles, jewellery and embroidered suits.
Early in the day, male family members offers Eid prayers in the mosque among a huge gathering. Immediately after Eid prayers, people begin to embrace each other in the mosque, along with offering words of congratulation. ("Eid Mubarak").
After that, people start going to their relatives’ homes [alternative:  to the homes of their relatives] to meet and embrace each other.   friend’s family [?? 2] and relatives exchange Eid greetings.
People who work out of town or abroad return home. 
People also go to meet with those people with whom they do not often see in their routine life.
Everyone gathers in someone’s home and enjoys something similar to a mini-party.

 

[1]  "For" is more appropriate, bec the people prepare new clothes etc. <em>before </em>the Eid holy day, not "on" the very day of the holy day.

 

[2]  Sorry, I couldn't quite understand the phrase beginning with "friend's family".

 

Your post was written very well.

July 28, 2014
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