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IELTS writing task 2 answer (16) (should unpaid community service be compulsory to teenagers?) Question: Some people believe that some unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (e.g. working in a charity, improving the relationship of neighbourhood or teaching sports to children) To what extent do you agree or disagree? Answer: Whether teenagers should be made to do unpaid work has triggered a controversy. Although I acknowledge that this may be an infringement of young people’s rights in some cases, I would argue that in most situations this will benefit society and young people themselves. It is true that sometimes forcing teenagers to work, especially without payment, may push them to be exploited in the workplace. For governments, it is fairly difficult to regulate exactly which jobs should students do. Some unethical companies, therefore, may take advantage of this loophole to hire teenagers to do unpaid work in order to gain cheap labour. In this case, young people may spend their precious teenage time being squeezed for other people’s profit. However, once potential workplaces for this type of community service are approved by authorities, it would benefit society. All around the world there is a labour shortage in many parts of public sectors. Young people’s contribution would improve some public services. For example, many hospitals are in need of porters, if teenagers can do this as a part-time job, it would allow trained professionals to concentrate on more skilled tasks and offer better care to patients. In addition, teenagers would mature as individuals if they went out to work as volunteers. Nowadays, many teenagers lack sense of social responsibility and spend much of their time taking care of their own issues. A real life task, therefore, will teach them to learn important life skills like responsibility, teamwork and leadership, and they need these skills to grow into a mature person. Moreover, these skills will definitely benefit them in adult life. In conclusion, I believe that while there are downsides of stipulating teenagers to do volunteer work, this proposal will generate more benefits to society and teenagers as individuals.
Jul 29, 2014 11:02 AM
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IELTS writing task 2 answer (16) (should unpaid community service be compulsory to teenagers?)

Question:
Some people believe that some unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (e.g. working in a charity, improving the relationship of neighbourhood or teaching sports to children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?



Answer:


Whether teenagers should be made to do unpaid work has triggered a controversy. Although I acknowledge that this may be an infringement of young people’s rights in some cases, I would argue that in most situations this will benefit society and young people themselves.

 

It is true that sometimes forcing teenagers to work, especially without payment, may push them to be exploited in the workplace. For governments, it is fairly difficult to regulate exactly which jobs students should do. Some unethical companies, therefore, may take advantage of this loophole to hire teenagers to do unpaid work in order to gain cheap labour. In this case, young people may spend their precious teenage time being squeezed for other people’s profit.

 

However, once potential workplaces for this type of community service are approved by authorities, it would benefit society. All around the world there is a labour shortage in many parts of public sectors. Young people’s contribution would improve some public services. For example, many hospitals are in need of porters, if teenagers can do this as a part-time job, it would allow trained professionals to concentrate on more skilled tasks and offer better care to patients.

 

In addition, teenagers would mature as individuals if they went out to work as volunteers. Nowadays, many teenagers lacksense of social responsibility and spend much of their time taking care of their own issues. A real-life task, therefore, will teach them to learn important life skills like responsibility, teamwork and leadership, and they need these skills to grow into a mature person. Moreover, these skills will definitely benefit them in adult life.

 

In conclusion, I believe that while there are downsides to stipulating teenagers to do volunteer work, this proposal will generate more benefits to society and to teenagers as individuals.

July 29, 2014

I just want to address the last paragraph:

 

In conclusion, I believe that while there are downsides to stipulating that teenagers <em>to</em> do volunteer work, this proposal will generate more benefits to society and teenagers as individuals.

 

"To stipulate" means to demand something, but it isn't an action—it's a command.  So you have to use it the same way you'd use "said" or "told."

July 31, 2014
We're about to face this situation in Australia quite soon.
July 30, 2014
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