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My cover letter This is my first cover letter and also my first English letter. Could anybody help me check it about form, grammar, vocabulary,....Thank you very much :)) Pham Thanh Thuy Thanh Xuan, Hanoi Mobile: July 30, 2014 Human Resources Manager Samsung Display Co.,Ltd Re: Purchasing staff Dear Sir/Madam, I am Pham Thanh Thuy, a new graduate of National Economics University. From your company’s fan page I learned about your need for support staffs. I am very interested in these positions, especially with the purchasing position and believe that my education and employment background are appropriate for this position The very first reason that I find this position attractive is that my career objective is working in a professional working environment. I choose the purchasing position because my major is Economics Investment. After 4 years at university, I have studied basic knowledge about economics so that I can make the acquaintance of this job. Besides, before graduating, I worked at Hanoi Golden Investment., JSC as a consultant about finance investment as well as supporting sales teams, related to purchasing. In addition, I'm well-organized, hard working, responsible, and enthusiastic. I work very effectively and accurately under pressure, as part of a team or on my own. If given the opportunity, I believe that I will contribute positive results to your company. Please find more details in the CV enclosed. I am looking forward to the occasion to meet you for further discussion. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Pham Thanh Thuy
Jul 29, 2014 5:16 PM
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My cover letter

This is my first cover letter and also my first English letter. Could anybody help me check it about form, grammar, vocabulary,....Thank you very much :))
Pham Thanh Thuy
Thanh Xuan, Hanoi
Mobile:

July 30, 2014
Human Resources Manager
Samsung Display Co.,Ltd
Re: Purchasing staff


Dear Sir/Madam,


I am Pham Thanh Thuy, a new graduate of the National Economics University. From your company’s website I learned about the current support staff vacancies. I am very interested in applying for these positions, and the purchasing position in particular. I believe that my education and employment background make me an ideal candidate.


I am interested in working in a professional enviroment and my major in Economics Investment has equipped me with the financial knowledge and interest needed for the advertised purchasing position. In addition to my formal education on economics, I have worked at Hanoi Golden Investment., JSC as a financial investment consultant and supported sales teams related to purchasing.


In addition, I am well-organized, hard working, responsible, and enthusiastic. I work effectively and accurately under pressure, as part of a team or on my own. Given the opportunity, I believe that I will contribute positive results to your company. Please find more details in attached CV.

I look forward to the occasion to meet you for further discussion. Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Pham Thanh Thuy

 

[This is a great letter, well done and good luck! Although it is not an English related comment, I suggest you mention why you want to work for that SPECIFIC company in the second paragraph. Show them that you have done your homework, basically.]

July 29, 2014
Would you like just grammar corrections or more general CV edits?
July 29, 2014
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