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Early mid-life crisis Yesterday, I was told that my childhood friend’s father, who was only in his early fifties, had passed away because of cancer. Naturally I feel sorry for him, but on the other hand, I am depressed and begin to question the conventional paths designed for most average people, which involve a quite number of things that society expects us to do, such as a proper degree, a desent job, an eligible spouse with whom we may not necessarily fall in love, etc. My friend’s father managed to complete the list, but he was so unhappy. Throughout my life, I have always been a good girl, a good daughter, a good student, but I’m tired of it. I do not want to fit in the society and respond to certain rules anymore like I used to, maybe I am experiencing some sort of early mid-life crisis. I want to be brave and funny and creative and decisive, anything normal.
Jul 30, 2014 4:06 AM
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Early mid-life crisis

Yesterday, I was told that my childhood friend’s father, who was only in his early fifties, had passed away because of cancer. <em>(Perfect grammatically!)</em>

Naturally I feel sorry for him, but on the other hand, I am depressed and begin to question the conventional paths designed for most average people, which involve a quite a number of things that society expects us to attain or find do, such as a proper degree, a decent job, an eligible spouse with whom we may not necessarily fall in love, etc.  <em>(Wonderful work!  Note "quite a number of".  I used "attain or find" because you wouldn't "do" a degree, a job, etc.)</em>

My friend’s father managed to complete the list, but he was so unhappy. <em>(Perfect grammatically!)</em> 
Throughout my life, I have always been a good girl, a good daughter, a good student, but I’m tired of it. <em>(Again, perfect grammatically!)</em>

I do not want to fit in the society and respond to certain rules anymore like I used to.  <em>("Society" is uncountable.  When you use an uncountable noun in a general sense, leave out the definite article. Otherwise, you would use it.  Example:  "Work is becoming very challenging these days." (general sense) "The work my boss assigned me last night is very challenging." (specific sense)  I'd end the sentence here.)</em>

Maybe I am experiencing some sort of early mid-life crisis. I want to be brave and funny and creative and decisive, anything but normal.  <em>(Note "anything but..."  "This film is anything but entertaining!" (It's really, really boring!))</em>

<em>Very, very well done!  And I think you have had a quite valuable and commendable moment of insight.</em>

July 30, 2014
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July 30, 2014
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