Andy
Once A Riding I ever have cycled about forty kilometers long by bike, now when I think the experience again, I feel it is really a wonderful thing for me, I remember the day has strong typhoon, sometimes I can barely go forward, I have to bow on the bicycle for avoiding the preventing of wind. I through two long tunnels, I have no enough energy to through it, I was exhausted, so I walked a half maybe more length of the tunnel with my bike. And it was rain, the weather is to bad too cycle, how dare I am to finish the long way to my college school, I feel a little fare when I remind it again. From the others' eyes beside the road , I think they must want to say how silly the guy is, but I don't think too much,I just ride and ride again. It is really hard but beautiful, I have a unforgettable thing to remind at least.
Aug 1, 2014 1:06 AM
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September 9, 2014

Once A Riding

I ever have once cycled about forty kilometers long by bike. Now when I think about the experience again, I feel it is was really a wonderful thing for me. I remember the that day has there was a strong typhoon, so sometimes I can could barely go forward. I would have to bow forward on the bicycle for avoiding to the preventing of minimize wind resistance. I went through two long tunnels, but I have no did not have enough energy to make it through. it, I was exhausted, so I walked about half maybe more the length of the tunnel with my bike. And it was still raining, so the weather was too bad to cycle. How daring I was to finish the long way ride to my college! school, I feel a little fare (<--这里的fare有什么意思?) when I remember it. remind it again. From the looks other people on the road gave me, I think they must have wanted to say how silly the this guy is, but I don't didn't think too much about it. I just kept on riding and riding. ride and ride again. It is was really hard but beautiful, and now I have a unforgettable thing to remind remember at least.

 

很有意思的经历!主要的修改就是动词时态、正确地用连词、有时候写短一点的句子。这个经历是过去的,所以动词应该用过去时。

August 2, 2014
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