LAI CHON LAN
My favorite fruit Malaysia is in the season of durian at the moment. You can see that it is sold everywhere wherever you go. Yesterday my husband bought back 2 big packets of durian home. However he did not eat at all, as he cannot bear the smell of it. But I love it very much. All my children are staying in the student dormitories, therefore I ate the durian alone. Since it was so delicious, I ended up eating too much without realizing it.
Aug 2, 2014 12:52 AM
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My favorite fruit

Malaysia is in middle of the durian season of durian at the moment. You can see that it is sold/it on sale everywhere, wherever <em>(you really don't need both everywhere and wherever, wherever will do)</em> you go. Yesterday my husband brought back 2 big packets(?)/parcels/bundles <em>(surely they don't sell durian in packets, just wrap them securely)</em> of durian home. However he did not eat any at all, as he cannot bear the/its smell of it. But I love it very much and since all my children are staying in the student dormitories, therefore <em>(we tend to use 'therefore' quite rarely, it being formal, so since is preferable I feel)</em> I ate the durian alone. Since (Because I used since last sentence!) It was so delicious, that I ended up eating too much without realizing it!

 

<em>There are no real errors except 'brought', just suggestions ...</em>

August 2, 2014
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