Eszter
自我介绍 大家好! 我叫Eszter,今年二十二岁。我来自匈牙利。我是大学生,我的专业是工商管理。我喜欢听歌,看电影,看书,旅游。我刚开始学习中文。
Aug 19, 2014 3:52 PM
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自我介绍

大家好!
我叫Eszter,今年二十二岁, 来自匈牙利。現在大学生,我的专业是工商管理。我喜欢听歌,看电影,看书 旅游, 开始学中文。

 

You don't need to start every sentence or phrase with "I" or "My".  It is understood.  Makes your writing like a kid's.  Anyway, you got the grammar and structure well.  You have learnt well.

August 19, 2014
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自我介绍

大家好!
我叫Eszter,今年二十二岁。我来自匈牙利。我是大学生,我的专业是工商管理。我喜欢听 音乐,看电影,看书,旅游。我刚开始学习中文。

 

 

August 19, 2014
谢谢!你的英语很好。加油!
August 24, 2014
Hello~ I think your Chinese is very well. but,strictly speaking,we use “、” this punctuation to Instead of “ ,” in this case(to express parallel),we call it “顿号[dùn hào]”,and it not exist in English. “我是一名大学生,我的专业是工商管理。我喜欢听歌、看电影、看书和旅游。” I’m a college student too,I major in Marketing.(I‘m sorry my English is poor,I spend many times to translate there sentence,and I don't know if I express it clearly.)
August 20, 2014
It is good. don't need to correct. come on
August 20, 2014
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