Maca
This December, I am going to París! Hi, my name is Maca. The next christmas, I am going to París with my boy friend. The last birhtday I gave away a travel to París and I was in París already, I want to repeat. París is amazing above in Christmas.Te city is full of light, small shops of souvenirs and walking down the street is a pleasure. We really like the hot wine and nutella crepes. It is very good. At night is amazing to up to "Sacre Coeur" in Montmartre district and visit the small christmas market. I am in love Paris.
Aug 20, 2014 8:19 AM
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<em>     My</em> name is Maca, <em>and</em> I am going to <em>Paris</em> with my <em>boyfriend this Christmas. </em>I gave away a <em>ticket</em> to <em>Paris</em> <em>last year because</em> I was in <em>Paris</em> already, <em>but I am going again.  </em>

<em></em>     <em>Paris</em> <em>was</em> amazing <em>over</em> Christmas. <em>This city was</em> filled <em>with</em> <em>Christmas lights and</em> small <em>souvenir shops</em> <em>which made</em> walking down the street a pleasure. We really <em>liked</em> the hot wine and <em>the</em> <em>Nutella</em> crepes.<em> It was an amazing trip up to</em> "Sacre Coeur" in <em>the </em>Montmartre <em>District to</em> visit <em>their</em> small Christmas <em>Market at night.</em> I am in love <em>with </em>Paris.  

    <em>No accented "i" in Paris. Placed "when" you did things after what they are for clarity and less passivity. Included past-tense verbs in your second paragraph. </em>

August 20, 2014

This December, I am going to París!

Hi, my name is Maca.

Next christmas, I am going to París with my boyfriend.

My last birhtday, I visited Paris; I would like to go there again.

Paris is amazing at Christmas.The city is full of lights, small souvenir shops, etc. Walking along the streets is a real pleasure.

We really like the hot wines and nutella crepes. Excellent!

At night it's amazing to go up to "Sacre Coeur" in Montmartre district, and visit the small christmas market.

I am in love with Paris.

August 20, 2014

This December, I am going to París!

Hi, my name is Maca.
This Christmas, I am going to París with my boyfriend.
On my last birthday I gave away a ticket to París as I was in París already. I want to go back there.
The streets in París are amazing above at Christmas.The city is full of light, with small shops of souvenirs and walking down the street is a pleasure.
We really like the hot wine and nutella crepes. They are very good.
At night it is amazing to go up to "Sacre Coeur" in the Montmartre district and visit the small Christmas market.
I am in love with Paris.

 

Hi Maca, sounds like you will have a wonderful Christmas this year! You are making me curious to see this all for myself!

Don't forget, in English, that every object/subject has a definate/indefinate article attached to it. For example: The Montmatre District, An apple, A fish

August 20, 2014
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