Ana
Greece This summer i was in Greece with some friends, we visited Athens, Santorini and Rhodes. Athens has beautiful monuments but what i loved most was Santorini, it's a jewel, it's really beautiful and lovely. I would love to come back. So if you can go there i really recommend you this awesome island. ^^
Aug 21, 2014 10:48 AM
Corrections · 3
hello how are you? you have skype? i speak english. i live in the USA skype: nicholas.henry.lyons
October 8, 2014

     I was in Greece with <em>my</em> friends over the summer. We visited Athens, Santorini, and Rhodes. Athens has<em> its</em> beautiful monuments, but <em>the place</em> I loved <em>the</em> most was Santorini. It's a <em>"jewel"</em> -- beautiful. I would love to <em>go</em> back. <em>I recommend this island to all who are able to go.</em> 

     <em>There is no need to use "really," "lovely," "awesome," and also remember the difference in use between the words: "come" and "go". When we speak, we use unnecessary adjectives, adverbs, and other linking words as filler; to help us think, or to create a pause. In collegiate writing we should attempt to be concise and succinct. Save the "flowery" language for prose and creative writing. Good work expressing yourself in English, Ana. </em>

August 22, 2014

It sounds great! I just fixed the punctuation and turned "i" into "I".

 

This summer I was in Greece with some friends. We visited Athens, Santorini, and Rhodes. Athens has beautiful monuments, but what I loved most was Santorini ("what" is not wrong, but I would suggest saying "the place I loved most" because it sounds more natural). It's a jewel. It's really beautiful and lovely. I would love to come back. So if you can go there I really recommend you this awesome island.

August 21, 2014
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!