People may <em>consider music to be only a form</em> of entertainment, but surveys have shown that music can <em>improve one's health</em>. Music is my hobby. I grew up in a musician's family, <em>and</em> I have inherited my musical skill from my parents. <em>I started practicing</em> piano <em>when</em> I was <em>just </em>five years old.
Music <em>provides </em>encouragement, <em>especially </em>when <em>people</em> are not in a good mood. In addition, <em>one may</em> relate <em>songs</em> with people <em>they have met, or</em> places <em>they have</em> been. <em>Music</em> can transmit many feelings.
<em>Listening to music</em> is recommended for babies, <em>because </em>it benefits <em>their</em> development. <em>I recommend that adults listen to music as well; </em>not only <em>for</em> entertainment, but also for <em>the reduction of stress and anxiety. </em>
<em> Lucia,
Good writing. I have formatted a few sentences differently for readability and word-flow. Consider avoiding writing in the second-person voice (you, yours). The third-person voice (one, they, their) is appropriate for argument papers like this. Thank you. </em>
Music
Nowadays, people use music as a way of entertainment, but various surveys have shown that music can help you to be healthier.
Music is my hobby. I've played the piano since I was five years old, I grew up in a musician's family maybe that's the reason I inherited this skill.
Music can encourage you even when you are not in a good mood. In addition, when you are listening to music you can relate a song with people that you've met or beautiful places that you've been. It can transmit so many feelings!
Music is recommended for babies, it benefits their development. It should be also recommended for adults, not only as a way of entertainment but also as a way to reduce stress and anxiety.
Great job!
