Javier
Nightmare. The last week I had a terrible nightmare. When I woke up I felt really frightened. In fact, I lie awake at that night, and I took sleeping pills because I had insomnia. When it sunrise came I got up for working but I felt like very tired. In the job I felt sleepy and I fell asleep, I woke up when I heard a noise. At night I didn't stay late and I got bed soon, before of bedtime and at last I had good night sleep. Into the nightmare, I was crawling a long the road, I saw the cars towards me and I tried to run towards the trees. When I arrived close the trees I tried to climb up them, but I was very frightened and I could not do it. Then I looked at back me and there were people instead cars and they chased me along the park. I felt like frightened and then I woke up. It’s was an awful nightmare. If you have a few minutes and are able to review my composition I would be very grateful. Thanks in advance.
Aug 27, 2014 4:48 PM
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Nightmare.

The Last week<em> </em>I had a terrible nightmare. When I woke up I felt really frightened. In fact, I lie laid awake at that night, and I took sleeping pills because I had insomnia. When it sunrise came, I got up for working but I felt like very tired. In At the job I felt sleepy and I fell asleep. I woke up when I heard a noise. At night, I didn't stay until late, and I got went to bed soon, before of bedtime and at last I had a good (night's) sleep. <em>(The expression is "a good night's sleep", but I made a suggestion to avoid repeating the word "night")</em>


Into the nightmare, as I was crawling along the road, I saw the cars driving towards me and I tried to run towards the trees. When I arrived close to the trees, I tried to climb up them them up, but I was very frightened and I could not do it. Then I looked at back behind me and there were people instead of cars and they chased me along the park. I felt like frightened and then I woke up. It’s was an awful nightmare.

If you have a few minutes and are able to review my composition I would be very grateful.
Thanks in advance.


<em>I will explain more of the corrections I made:</em>

<em>- The past participle of the verb "to lay" (which is the correct one for your context, and not "to lie") is laid (More info here: http://www.grammar-monster.com/easily_confused/lay_lie.htm)</em>

<em>- The use of "like" : If you say exactly the way you felt (good/bad/not so well), there is no need to use "like". You should use it when you give an explanation about how you feel. Example:</em>
<em>   I feel good this morning. (No need to use "like")</em>
<em>   I feel like I am about to throw up (or say "I feel nauseous")  </em>
<em>   I feel like </em><em>I can do everything that I want (or say I feel empowered/energized/etc..)</em>

<em>You're welcome. 'Hope you'll sleep better. </em>

August 27, 2014

Nightmare.
The Last week I had a terrible nightmare. When I woke up I felt really frightened. In fact, I laid awake at that night, and I took sleeping pills because I had insomnia. When it sunrise came, I got up for working but I felt like very tired. In the At my job I felt sleepy, and I fell asleep, and I woke up when I heard a noise. At night I didn't stay late, and I got bed soon, before of bedtime, and at last I had a good night’s sleep.



Into the nightmare, I was crawling along the road, I saw the cars driving (or coming) towards me, and I tried to run towards the trees. When I arrived (or got) close to the trees, I tried to climb up them, but I was very frightened and I could not do it. Then I looked at back behind me, and there were people instead cars, and they chased me along the park. I felt like frightened, and then I woke up. It’s was an awful nightmare. 



If you have a few minutes and are able to review my composition I would be very grateful. 
Thanks in advance.

September 2, 2014
I can't really correct but really that is scary
August 27, 2014
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