sunshine
I won't care you anymore I won't care you anymore. My friends. Because I care you, while you din't care me. I don't like this feeling. So I decided not to care you in the future. I will care myself. Don't care others. Than this will not hurt me. So , I won't care the person who didn't care me. I will care the person who care me and love me. Don't care others too much, when you find that they didn't care you, than you will get hurt deeply. Love yourself deeply. Have a wonderful weekend.
Aug 30, 2014 1:46 AM
Corrections · 7

Hi Sunshine,

 

You've made a good effort, but your note is very monotonous and with a better selection of vocabulary could be quite poetic. I recommend looking in thesaurus.com and trying to find different ways to say the same thing to make it more interesting to read.

 

I don't care about you anymore, my friends. 


Because I cared about you, while but you didn't care for me.

I don't like this feeling, so I've decided not to care about you in the future.

I will care for myself and not Don't care about others.

Then this I will not be hurt me.

So, I won't care about the person who didn't care about me.

I will only care for the person who cares for me and loves me.

Don't care others too much about others, when you find out that they didn't care about you, because they than you will get hurt you deeply.

Love yourself deeply.

Have a wonderful weekend.

August 30, 2014

I won't care about you anymore

I won't care about you anymore. /No more do I care for you, My friends.

Because I cared for you, while you din't care for me.

I do not like this feeling.

So I decided not to care about you in the future.

I will care only for myself. I will forget the others.

Then all of this will not hurt me.

So , I won't care about the people who didn't care about me.

I will care only about the person who cares for me and loves me.

Don't care about others too much, when you find that they have not cared about you. If you do, you will get hurt so deeply.

Love yourself deeply.


August 30, 2014
Sunshine don't let anyone take away your shine, we go threw things to learn a lesson. Don't punish everyone for something that one or a few people did. Keep shining. Sounds like you have a good heart.
August 30, 2014
Yes. this is true.
August 30, 2014
You seems like you had hard time with someone. Cheer up!
August 30, 2014
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