Tina lee
Outdoor Sports--Climbing A Mountain I always remember a scene in the TV show Friends, where Monica had sex with a 17 years old high school boy, after making love, the boy said,”Wow, you read about it, you see it in the movies......it is nothing like that”. I think he finally understand about sex after experiencing it by himself. It is same with everything. After climbing a high mountain, I can understand something relevant to this. For example, the shorter path isn’t short in terms of saving time, and climbing mountain does’t mean climbing stairs,maybe walking on the small rocks or wet dirt. However,Walking on the wet dirt felt really comfortable. You can even cook on top of the mountain...... It is a really great experience for me.
Sep 3, 2014 2:34 AM
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Outdoor Sports--Climbing A Mountain

I always remember a scene in the TV show Friends, where Monica had sex with a 17 years old high school boy,.  aAfter making love, the boy said, ”Wow, you read about it, you see it in the movies......, it is nothing like that”. I think he finally understand understood about sex after experiencing it by for himself. It is same with everything.
After climbing a high mountain, I can understand something relevant similar to this. For example, the shorter path isn’t short in terms of saving time, and climbing a mountain does’t mean is not the same as climbing stairs, maybe more like walking on the small rocks or wet dirt. However, Wwalking on the wet dirt felt really comfortable. You can even cook on top of the mountain......
It is a really great experience for me.

 

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Your writing is very good, well done.  Try to not use multiple full stops (......), instead use either a comma (",") or a single full stop (".").

September 3, 2014
My friend, your English is improving.
September 3, 2014
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