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Could you correct my short post? Many thanks in advance for your help. How are things going? i hope all is well with you and this letter finds you in good health and in happiness. I have just returned from work, as usual I am tired and hungry but at least there was no traffic jam on my way home today. My daughter is still in a kindergarten and at 4 pm I must take her home. After the kindergarten we are planning to go buy her a doll. She has so many dolls and wants another one. As she says I am collecting dolls. But for me her dolls are disaster. Our small room of 10 sq.meter and there are lots of things ( my books, her toys) that the room gets messy so quickly. Today my mum friend potatoes and I was treated by my friend home made marinated mushrooms. So, now I am going to add some white and red onion into these marinated mushroom and add olive oil. Again, in the morning I was short of time to have a hearty breakfast in order to keep replete till my coming home. I took cheese and salami with bread and a bottle of kefir. Unfortunately, tomorrow I work. I was set with a task to be an invigilator at mock exams. It is so boring to look at the same faces three hours in a row. That's all for now. Please keep, take care. Yours, N
Sep 19, 2014 10:26 AM
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Could you correct my short post? Many thanks in advance for your help.

How are things going? i hope all is well with you and this letter finds you in good health and in happiness.
I have just returned from work.  As usual, I am tired and hungry, but at least there was no traffic jam on my way home today.
My daughter is still in a kindergarten, and at 4 pm I must bring her home. After the kindergarten, we are planning to go buy her a doll. She has so many dolls and wants another one. As she says, I am collecting dolls.
But for me her dolls are disaster. Our small room consists of 10 sq.meters, and there are lots of things ( my books, her toys) so the room gets messy so quickly. [Variant: ...there are so many things that the room gets messy....]
Today my mum fried potatoes, and I was treated by my friend to homemade marinated mushrooms. So, now I am going to add some white and red onionto the marinated mushrooms, and also add olive oil.
Again, in the morning I was short of time to have a hearty breakfast in order to keep full till my coming home.
I ate cheese and salami with bread and a bottle of kefir.
Unfortunately, tomorrow I work. I was assigned the task to be an invigilator [Amer.Eng: proctor [1]] at mock exams. It is so boring to look at the same faces three hours straight.
That's all for now.
Please keep, take care.
Yours,
N

 

[1]  I had never heard the word "invigilator" before.  Live and learn.

September 19, 2014
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